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Sorry about the detail folks.
This was originally made for youtube but I decided to convert it to a flash movie.
Here and there
The story wasn't bad. It's starting to look like one of the old mario bros cartoon series or something. The humor was also decent. Considering most animators make jokes that are funny to them and not everyone else, this made me smile once or twice.
Now for the heavy hitter, The animation was poor. This looks like it was made with windows movie maker (which is a possiblility, considering you said you converted TO a flash video). Having characters jump around the screen instead of actually walking or running breaks the flow of the video, as showing lack of skill and makes you look lazy ("I'm not animating a training sequence"?).
It might have been from the conversion, but the text was choppy and a little hard to read at times, and I'm not talking about the already slightly difficult to read font style you chose.
Take a little time off to practice a bit of real animation, make the subtitles a little more legible, and maybe upgrade the graphics you use. (Don't draw a bunch of crappy craters, find a sprite of one from Metal Slug or something ;p). This could shape up to be a really nice series.
Thanks, I am making a second one right now and your comments help as well as everyone elses.
ok you may give the first shot since i'm going to win
One thing you should add is effects, along with the option to make the movie continue only when you press a button.
The youtube-converting thing is a horrible idea, the product ends up looking way too blurry. Start with flash THEN convert to youtube.
On the positive side, you had an original concept and the humor didn't make me throw up like some of the other flash here.
Also, you could easily learn to make the movie flow better with practice, so don't think that you suck at flash, because you show a lot more potential than most people do. I know I say that a lot, but it's true!
Thanksfor the advice Ion24.
Truth be told is that I made this before I had aquiered a flash program.
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