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This is my first flash animation using sprites and its kind of funny so sit back watch and enjoy
was ok coulda been better
sprite a little slower more sounds don't let it loop otherwise good
"Sit back and enjoy?" Enjoy what? Two sprites jerking around 50 FPS? And where was the joke? I thought this was suppose to be funny.
As much as I appreciate the fact that this is your first flash and (as many people remind me) I probably couldn't do much better, I'll be reviewing this in the same way as I would anything else. Hopefully this will lead to my review being more informative for you.
The first thing that stood out about this Flash is the lack of sound. I'm sure other reviews will mention this too, but lack of any sound is a serious turnoff when viewing Flashes. A good, well fitting set of audio tracks can make the difference between a flash passing judgement or not. For sound-fx, a good place to check is Flashkit.com and Newground's own audio portal would be a great place for if you want to check for suiting background music.
The problem with using audio is, although it can be what makes a Flash, it adds to the filesize - which can cause people to be sitting there waiting for a long time before your Flash begins. A way to get around this is to add a preloader to your Flash. You can create your own, as this tutorial explains:
The alternative to creating your own is to use one of Newgrounds' stock preloaders, which can be found here:
These will show a bar of loading progress before your Flash starts, and when the load is completed a play button. Make sure to add "stop()" to the frame that contains it (1 or 2).
Another small issue is the text. It's all only for a few frames, and due to the lack of distinguishing colour you can't quite tell what it's saying. Something else that sticks out is how he seems to punch the ground for no reason whatsoever. Perhaps you just wanted to use these sprites, but I feel it breaks the flow that was just starting out on there after an unnatural feeling start generated by the sudden appearance of those zombie things, no transition whatsoever.
I wish you the best of luck on your future flashes, but this just didn't do it for me.
it is you're first one
it needs sound, though they are good sprites, i'll give you a 7 because it's your first one.
however, I have to agree with Sapphireluna and Jackson172. I can't read the words and sound will make this even better.
A short film about a park bench
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