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twas my first animation .
i dont care.
good for your first one
I like it
It's simple, and I like the style. You're still a little green, but I'm sure that your style will develop as time passes.
as they say, practice makes perfect.
Time to talk
For a first animation, I applaud you. Though this is not anything extraordinary, you have already gotten frame by frame animation down. I support this as frame by frame will always be better than a series of tweens in flash. You have a lot of potential so I'll try to offer critique based on what I saw in this animation and Jerry the Fly.
Both animations made me laugh. The funny actions were quick so I would say stick to that. If Newgrounds is lacking in anything, it's short and sweet animations of 30 seconds or less. The toughest part for you will be to properly convey your story. With your carrots, I'm fine with the random violence, it's a cartoon. It's allowed to happen for no particular reason. However, there could have been a much better build up to the final assault between the carrots. I think some close ups of facial expressions. This would be to show how unknowing the one carrot is to his friend's soon to happen assault. In Jerry the Fly, why does this small fly move off screen and a large humanoid one take it's place? You don't need a giant explanation, just an idea for the viewer would be nice. The small fly transforming into the large one suffices my curiosity. Like I said earlier, it's a cartoon and not everything needs to make sense.
Thank you,it´s nice to get actual constructive critisism.I´ll keep erything you said in mind when i do my next one and maybe take a bit more time for it.
I´m still getting used to working with a tablet and flash confuses me sometimes(im electronically handicapped)but i really do want to learn how to do proper animations with,as you said, a proper storyline and more effort put in it.
I was planning on making the fly transform into the big fly-man,but it was 3 am and i couldnt figure out how to make it look nice ( bad excuse).
And i´m glad it made you laugh (:
guy drains his main vein.
The first episode of my original anime
Two Men Fight to the Death!
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