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this has been lurking in the depths of my hardrive for almost a year
I just added a few sound effects and optimized it a bit
a little unfinished however
and leave me some constructive criticisms please
edit: preloader fixed........ eh sorry about that
Love how the ending doesn't make sense :D keep it up
Yeah thanks for the 10!! We might make a sequel....SOON!!!
What? What kind of ending is that? Guy shoots the blobs shins... THE END.
The main problem with this is your lack of effort in your animation. It was incredibly blocky and rough. By this I mean you don't spend enough time on your frame by frame work and instead, depend largely on tweens and simple "drag" movements. An example of this is tumbleweed effect, character movements, etc.
The only real frame by frame work you did was so minor and so short that it played no real part to the animation.
Your background music was alright, I grew accustomed to it. But it was so bland that it didn't build any levels of suspense, action or anything else that music usually does in these animations. Also, the whistle loop was not transitioned and repeated very well.
You need to spend a little more time on this before submitting. I suggest using a smaller brush type for your outlines, and possibly not sticking to an entire black outline for everything, at least with this style.
Good luck in the future.
yeah this had very minimal effort and well was just an few hours messing on flash
it's also kinda old and was more of a learning process i guess than an actual finished piece thanks on the background music critique I actually had never really thought about this much and my decisions are usually pretty meh and don't provide suspense either
I am and have been working on a large 2 part mostly frame by frame piece for a while now aswell as a few other smaller pieces that are much more developed than this
thanks for taking the time to respond to my flash
It wasn't bad, and the animation was pretty decent. As for criticism:
-In the beginning, when the blob came out, I didn't really get why half of the grass turned the same color as him.
-Work on perspective a bit. I'm guessing the whole static effect at the beginning was a tape of some sort, so I guess between then and the attack on the city he became larger. In the beginning, the tumbleweed was about half as big as the crater, and it was behind the crater, meaning it was further away.
-It was a bit quiet, and the music seemed a bit calm for a giant blob terrorizing a city. Also, at the end the guy shooting at the blob's bottom had no sound for his gun. I'm not sure if this was intentional or due to it being unfinished.
If I had to give one overall piece of advice, try to make sure your work is finished before uploading it. The movie seemed to end very abruptly , I'm guessing you just used fill to make a blue background, type "End............" on it, and dump that at the end. Try not to do that.
Overall 7/10 for effort and it not being horrible. Keep at it, and try not to take my criticism too hard.
best review ever!
thanks i think you picked up on most of the things i wasn't happy about being lazy
as for the shitty static that was just something i was I was trying out
the tumbleweed yeah too big that was supposed to be cut and yeah at the very end got lazy and no gun sound effects
the main reason for it being unfinished was it had been converted from flash cs4 to cs3 and was all laggy in flash
thanks for the review and I think I'll take your advice about perspective on board! :D
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