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This is the second version of this movie, since we did the last one we got more time to work on it, so we uploaded the new one now.
And as the last one, we are still very nobbish in flash so be gentle with the comments and give us tips on how to improve
i wish i culd be like that good in my life
Artistically basic, but ambitious
While this flash might not be a Mozart masterpiece, it does have competent animation and moves along at a brisk pace. It has room for improvement but I feel you'll do just that no problem in future.
Has that "12 year old made" feel to this.
- Try some frame by frame work for your characters.
- People are not transparent.
- How is someone a hero for going around and killing hundreds of cops?
- blah blah, generic shoot 'em up.
To be honest, you need to work on the artistic capability a lot more than the flash animation. It looks like half the objects are drawn in paint. Also, where you displayed part of the story in text form, this will put off a lot of viewers. Keep the text parts very short, and make it something worth looking at, with snazzier graphics. Not bad if it's your second attempt at the actual flash program though.
Okay so here goes....
Music, it only it had some music i would have doubled the score, poor animation can only get you so far. It had soma assemblance of a plot which is more then i can say for many submissions so it has that going for it at least. Don't explain the story, show it! Also the intro of your names was way to slow, if you are that egotistical at least make a logo with an interesting animation or pleasant font. It wasn't bad for a first go but it wasn't anything great either. Take your time on the animation, there's no rush to put something out there that isn't ready. As far as stick figures go, people draw them when they can't draw or the message of the story does not need detailed animation, the things i saw in this were just a mess...there is a lot of good stick work(insert joke here) out there and it is because of the ease of animation when using stick figures, when i see someone try to use them for animation it sucks when they are used so simply. If your character isn't going to be fully animated, develop the drawing more!
Better luck next time.
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