Score: 10
"Constructive criticism"
date: November 9, 2009
You got a top 5 spot so obviously we think you have potential but I want to make a few comments.
I like your story and plot, but the execution of the dialogue between the black haired guy and the blue haired kid was really awkward, and when i say that i don't mean awkward in a good funny way it was just poorly cut or timed or something like that.
Spend some time really beefing up the opening scene. It's lame and set a lame mood.
Those are just some tidbits I feel like I'd spend a little extra time in, but other than that I'd say you have a good flash series. Keep em comin!
