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My second submission ever, watch this and maybe give me a fair rating (or a shitty one, whatever).
Beside from the obvious, already pointed out lack of colour, for a 2nd its excellent :]! I do however feel that ng is a place not just to upload any work, so im critiquing it just like i would a normal animation
Some great talent is evident, good use of panning for example, and a great story line, and background knowledge (most people would just say the plane ran out of fuel or something). What im saying is that with enough practice, and definatly alot of patients you could defiantly make truly great animations
I'll just respond to this one for all the other ones as well. Thanks for the suggestions, I'll definitely be adding color next time. And working on my drawing is always important, but it's good to know people care enough to give helpful suggestions.
A good example how sounds can turn into something really awfull to something funny.
So everyone take your lesson from this, a good flash/game with poor or none sounds is much worse then a bad flash with good sound efffects.
More than the sum of its parts.
First off,excellent use of sound.
The artwork whilst being somewhat scruffy is also charming and does the job for a short work like this. The animation itself is pretty damn good.
The story is short and sweet, but quite amusing(especially the panic of the passengers hehe).
Overall good work, hope you make many more.
I'll be late for dinner, honey
While the drawing wasn't very good, it actually had a story, and a surprising and original joke at the end.
That with the fact that it's your second submission, I would say, try to improve the graphics and it should be better.
A short film about a park bench
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