A short film done for a first-year university project. Enjoy!
notbad
~~REVIEW~~
Notbad it was interesting, the color seemed abit bland maybe add some color or deeper and darker colors or something
~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
Deeper and more detail in backrounds, and much more colors
~~OVERALL~~
good bu needs more detail
~X~
hey wayn, thanks for the input, i will definitely keep it in mind the next time i open flash
Overall: Keep going
Pros:
- Good story
- Appropriate music
Cons:
- Visuals somewhat shoddy
- Animation is stiff
your on your way!
You should give it more time. Some drawings are nice others are just horrible. If you give one leg colour, you should give the other leg colour too.
6 for the effort.
Touching
It's a sad story. Just a little better animation would give you a 10 rating. Good job.
The guy who killed the "father" should've spoke up sooner. Stupid guy...
This was my very first attempt, but i agree, there is definite room for improvement with the animation. thanks for your input!
Cliche storyline that only differs with errors
If the killer was a proud father avenging the death of the lead's mother, why didn't he hang around for his child? 10 years of avoidance... ya right. Storyline works as well as the graphics and youtube style text fade ins.
Contempt, i can imagine why you think (note the word, THINK) the storyline is ciche, but that is why i added the twist at the end. facts that i had in mind when writing the storyline was that nobody hangs around after a murder. nonetheless, you are entitled to your opinion