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This was my first, REAL, flash animation i made with my sister. It started as a test on voices when i had a cool idea.
I can tell you walked away
haha thanks, it was fun to make
very good flash for your first man, i gope you get better and make more ones like this
thanks man, i really appreciate it :)
The voice work was pretty strong, the graphics were sufficient for what you were doing. Keep it up.
this is good for a first flash. I gave you a 4.
There wasnt a lot of animation, the mouth and the eyes only, you could try to put more next time. It was funny xD
Haha thank you that makes me happy, yea i was thinking about that when i was making it, but i wanted to stick with what i have, so i can see what people like, i might do a remake or even a part two. THANKS AGAIN :D
Could use subtitles
It's not a bad piece, but the audio quality was a little sucky and there wasn't really enough animation for my liking, but it's got potential.
Perhaps ask your sister to stay a little further away from the microphone when she does her lines - it gives a little static overtone when she speaks.
There could be a little more animation, as it's just a head moving, which is quite basic. Perhaps fade something into the background, like the detail of the interrogation cell - the light will give off enough effect for you to put some greys in there, so make the most of it.
Hand drawing is always good as well - the character looks weird with the eyes being different sizes and lopsided, so play to that as it is, just make it look a little more normal. You'll get there, but making the guy look like a complete freak isn't the way to go - a few more subtle things would help, so straighten the head up a little, make the eyes more uniform sized and as the tweaks become more subtle, you'll find that they have more impact.
Finally, adding a subtitle bar would really help you - I could understand about 1 word in 10, which is a real shame.
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aha, well the real reason i posted this animation was to see what tips people would give me and im currently working on one with a better mic and lots of animation, thanks for the tips man its helpful
A short film about a park bench
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