Phoenix Ash Opening by Dayu


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Dayu

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Submitted: 08/25/2009 | 06:13AM EST

File Info: Movie | 1.6 MB | Add Movie to Favorites

Current Score: 3.82 / 5.00

768 votes | 8,953 views

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Hello newgrounds!

This is my FIRST animation I've done with Adobe Flash.
It is just a try and it was very difficult for me, since I'm a total beginner here.
I know the animation is stiff, but the art is ok. I try to improve to show you a better animation next time.

Story:
The boy with the orange hair is called Phoen and he's the main character of my story.
Neono, the blonde girl is a friend who fixes his bike when it got damaged during the bike contest in the city's colosseum. Phoen is bad at these things, he only wants to ride his bike.
The bike's name is 'Renji IX' and it's a 2003 Harley Davidson Fat Boy.
Phoen's uncle Kenzo runs a bike shop in a suburban area.

NOSE STORY: My characters don't have a nose?! That's not correct.
The nose is not visible in the front, you can see it from the side, though.

I've done my best so far and I hope I get better =)

The song is from a band called Charcoal Filter (1996 - 2007)
and is registered under Nippon Record:
http://www.crownrecord.co .jp/artist/charcoal/whats .html

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Average Score: 8.8 / 10

Score: 7
rjblaze215

"not bad"

date: November 19, 2009

Ok start for your first flash.
Kept me interested to the end
didn't really notice any antagonist in this put i'm ehh i'm not picky.
though some things you should keep in mind for future work.
You Focused alot on the coloring, more the the animation itself.
Try to add more movement to your characters so they aren't so stiff
it just makes everything seem like pictures.
I would suggest try frame by frame animation
it makes things more fluid and life like (DON'T ABUSE TWEENS THEY MAKE THINGS LOOK HORRIBLE) and that would mean cutting back alittle on the detail that you put so much work into
and also try taking advise from comments that don't just say "omg nice art great animation" ...because that won't help you at all. Also sorry for the blunt response I try to be clear when I want to help....Good luck with future projects.

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Score: 9
wizardmon444

"Nice.."

date: August 28, 2009

Very nice. The drawing was great, the animation was pretty good, and the concept, while not wholly 'Original', was interesting. However, two people can only get you so far. You might want to think about adding a third guy for character diversity. You know, someone who appears often, but doesn't play a real role in much. A good example would be the owner of that restaurant they were in. But it's your call. Overall, I really see talent, and I find that noses are really difficult to animate, so you probably shouldn't bother with them. =)

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Score: 10
LordBelial666

"kanckles"

date: August 27, 2009

love em

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Score: 7
stigmaaa

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date: August 27, 2009

Ok, overall its great but...
Although the animation was great and the flash was nice i still have the need to say somting. Your doing a good job but are you not pushing it with the arm and the gun with the blade? i meen every show and series has a thing.. you'rs have a cool arm when needed right? so why the fucking dose he need a pestole.. give it the the chick.. also your clip had like in every part of 1-2 seconds like hes just sterring at the viewer next time cut them or just get to the action abit faster.

Animation - 10/10
Music - 7/10
Originality - 7/10

W8ing for the series.. :p

August 27, 2009

Author's Response:

hello there, thanks for the comment!

Phoen can't get these powers when he needs them, that's why he has a gun, or gunblade or whatever =)
But you're right, I might only use 1 or 2 special things for a character.

Action is the problem here, I know.
But since this is my first animation I couldn't just know everything to do a proper clip. But I try to improve, that's for sure.

I hope I can start the series once I improved enough.

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Score: 10
StiffNoodle

"Nice"

date: August 26, 2009

hoping to c more!

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