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FAUX Chapter III
Jan is unknowingly used as bait by Reuger to lure Lacorse to the police station. But things go wrong very quickly.
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I really have enjoyed the series so far. Some of the frames I thought that their facial expressions didnt match the situation that they were in or what a person should look like if they are surprised or flirting or fearful for their life. Your drawing style is quarky and likeable I only wish your flash skills would allow you to do full movement instead of frames with speech bubbles.
Thought I should give you some encouragement for the speech bubbles. I think you are a little too far in the series to get voice actors and there would be an upset if you suddenly gave them voices. I suggest keeping the bubbles it adds mystique, but some times you give an excessive amount of time for us to read when it is not necessary and not enough time to read when it is... so general rule of thumb read what is in the bubble (time yourself and allow a couple seconds extra for us idiots to read) or hell just add a "NEXT BUTTON"
love where the series is going keep it up I'm looking forward to more.
the one thing i didn't like was that part when she woke up it got me confused
very good, but needs some work
This was pretty nice, i don't know why everyone is dissin this zillis guy, he makes some pretty good points and to be honest you'll get better much slower when everyone tells you your work is just the best. If i was you i would take into account what he has said cause it's all true. the artwork is really really nice for the most part, you may want to work on your staging a bit though, in the scene where the dude and the girl are talking he kind of is sitting, then standing at the door and sitting again, just confuses a little, and also in the beggining when they bust through the door at first i thought he was confronting the bad dude but was really trying to get away, was a bit confusing with those shots, but sound was put together really well, probably the strongest part of the animation, and even though its not ruined if the faces are a bit uneven, it will become a whole lot easier to animate if your characters are constructed properly, usually with the eyes that kind of thing. but yeah its pretty good, just needs a bit of tweaky here and there, but its captivating. Also as nice as it is to hear that its just awesome, this kind of critisism will probably help you more than anything to improve your skills, just remember your not just an animator or artist, but a story teller too.
much love and hope to see more :)
I liked it but...
at times what they were saying went by too fast. If you slow it down a bit, people will be able to read everything.
i like your style and drawing skills. the bubble speech is ok, but some of these bubbles disappear too early and i don't have the time to read everything. i'm not exactelly a slow reader...
the story seemes ok so far.
another thing i didn't like is the absebce of a play button. i hate it when animatiosn start as soon as they load because i may not be ready to view them yet.
other than that, keep up the good work. cheers.
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