Score: 7
"So far so good."
date: August 20, 2009
The story you've developed is fantastic so far. There are just a few minor details you have to work on.
1.Acting the part: The voices for your characters match, but the magic for the Main character's voice and the canine isnt there. Try putting more feeling into those two.
2.Even though the story is good, it seemed rather fast paced at the end. Made things rather confusing.
3.Character development: Its rather odd somewhat having the main character the only dragon to have more of a humanoid form then the others. Also, her personality seems iffy. in the beginning she acted as though she's a girl who wants to succeed in order to be with the others. Yet when her 'male friend???" came to try cheering her up, she seemed then to be the time who was a loner.
Finally 4. Silly obsession with observation of pointless details... This is my problem but I simply have to point this out... The main character finds a well and decides to drink out of it... How would a dragon build a well and how come not just simply drink our of a stream or near by lake? Are there more humanoid dragons like her who know how to find water and make wells? Are there no nearby masses of clean water? This subject you don't have to answer but keep in mind and watch out for flaws that might seem out of place of the scenery and story.
Thats all I have to point out and all I have to say now is you did a wonderful job. Fantastic story line you have here. I'll patiently wait for your new episodes. :D
7/10, 4/5
