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Me and my two best friends all got yo-yos, so I made this.
Note: We look exactly like in the video.
550 x 350
Really not that bad, but hopefully I can help.
~ Animation ~
The animation had a lot of room to be smoother, but in general it really wasn't too bad. I think that the character should have had mouths (even if they didn't have eyes), but of course that would involve voice acting.
~ Graphics ~
The drawings weren't terrible, but there was also some room for improvement. I think that the biggest thing that could have been improved in terms of graphics is the truck. Even though it went by fairly fast it was easily seen as a poor and rushed graphic.
~ Story/Content ~
Completely random and something that really didn't need a good story or a plot. I thought the no eyes part was kind of funny and that the truck at the end could have been funnier if you would have added somethings with it. (Will talk about that more in the audio) Seems like a plot that a beginner animator would use.
~ Audio ~
Some more sound effects other than what you had could have really improved this. For example when the truck came by it would have been more effective as a sudden joke if it would have made a beeping noise or a crashing noise when it hit the guys. Voice actors would have also made this much better and entertaining.
~ Overall ~
Work with the graphics slightly and add more sound effects/voices to make the submission more entertaining.
I liked to say that you've voiced my own opinion and I don't think this is the greatest and far from it. I've started working on a sequel that is coming along very slowly based all around plot, rather than random stupidity, (not that there isn't going to be any WINK).
This wasn't meant to be a project really, just a joke between me and my friends. My standards of quality are much higher now, and I'll hope you'll review future creations by me.
In the "special thanks" in the credits you say geoge bush is the greatest president ever.... PLEASE TELL ME YOUR JOKING.
What do you think Mike?
Work on it
This could be good if you optimize it a little bit, give 'em faces and voices, give 'em arms and maybe hands to hold the yo-yo, keep the idea, and repost it when you've built your skill a little bit. I wanna see this up in a month or so with some better graphics okay?!
I have thought about redoing this, but not in a month. I have another project I want to finish. Thank you for the review!
cool i liked it
MAybe better if it were more fast-paced, better drawn and had more of a plot but good anyway
Thanks, I appreciate the review.
Can't beat that game!!
It's Payday Fellas !
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