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I think I explained the majority of the purpose of this flash in the flash itself.
All I can add is that you should go by the Flash Forum and check out the Castle Crashers Collab!
Enjoy and leave a review.
Score: 3 / 10
Summary: Not satisfying
Review: Well, first off, I know that this is your first attempt at stop motion. Stop motion is not as easy as people think. There are a lot of factors that play in.
First off, you need to get a tripod for your camera. That way you'll make sure it stays still.
Next, make sure the lighting is well. Keep the same lighting in any scene, and stay away, you don't want to cast a shadow.
Scenery is important. In the second movie, you could clearly see the TV was on, and it wasn't flattering at all. Even if it's just a blank sheet of paper, it's better, and not distracting.
You had way too few pictures. You need at least twice, maybe even three times, as many, to make it smoother.
The clay sculptures were okay, but seeing as they were to resemble the Castle Crashers, you should work some more on them.
THe music was absolutely horrible. I guess you like it yourself, but it doesn't fit in at all.
And don't use the flash to explain stuff, that's what the Author's comment is for.
I think you should consider doing somethiing else, unless you're patient enough, as this is a very time-consuming genre. You should probably stick to voice acting, that's what you're good at :P
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I think it's pretty obvious from this work that you are just starting out with stop motion animations. Some basic things you need to work on...first off, keeping the camera steady. During the first scene it was really wobbly, which is quite noticeable. Also, some better scenery than a chair in the background would be nice. Just making something out of cardboard and construction paper would be better. Also, length is an issue here. I know you're just starting, and it's good practice, but there really isn't much content here.
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Alright, The actual stop motion animation wasn't too bad. Your biggest flaws were basically small things which you really needed in order to assist it. Obvious things really, wouldn't be too hard to master. Just time and a little effort would have the rest down packed, And have you with at least a 1 point score increase.
It had no plot. You need some sort of plot for pretty much everything. I mean, At least something tiny to run along with. You had a whole lot of writing in there, Just as much writing as you had animation. So therefore you should have made your writing look more professional. Capitals, punctuation, alignment, color, background, etc. It would be so easy to create a better screen for your written area. Not much I know, but everything adds up.
Also, your camera work wasn't good either. The camera moved a bit, and was out of focus when the object got closer to it. Most cameras are easy to keep in focus. That was a big problem, Can't do claymation if you can't correctly record claymation. Just leads to problems.
Good luck with future projects.
Thank you for your review
Stick to voice acting, I think..
Well, the actual animation was extremely short, so there's very little I can say about it. However, you did manage to keep the lighting consistent, which is not always easy with stop-motion animation.
The text wasn't too good either. It was the world's most boring font (Times New Roman) on a white background. You'll need to try much harder..
There wasn't really any plot or concept. I'll give you 1 point for the peanut joke :P
The music was fine, but it didn't match the flash at all. You're a voice actor, so you could have actually said the things in text, it would have made it better.
Whatever you do, don't give up the day job :P
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lol, I won't give it up man. Thanks for being honest, and yeah, ill stick with the voice acting. This was more of an experiment than anything. Thanks for your criticism!
Make a New one with more things in it because that was one of the shortest flash i have ever seen.
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Ill keep working on it!
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