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Oh no I'm all alone. A short music video loop I made from some song I found at NG done by jackbliss.
Not too bad.
~ Animation/Graphics ~
There are a couple of things to improve on here. First off you could improve the drawing just a bit. The animation to the voice wasn't synced up the best, but also wasn't terrible. There is some room for improvement there. Something that I would have liked to see though would be a nice background. Something pretty simple such as outside with some trees/clouds or maybe even something inside with a table/bookshelf in the background. Maybe even a nice little fade or blur effect on the things in the background for extra effect.
Another thing that can look cool with something like this is some small background animation. Whether it just be the wind blowing something by in the background or whether it be something like a clock changing time. There is actionscript for a clock so it would just keep moving along as time went by in the real world.
~ Story/Content ~
There just isn't much here. When I think of a music video I think of a lot of exciting scenes. I understand that this was a small loop, but what would have been better would be adding a different scene a bunch of times whenever he sang the lines over again. Since this was about being alone you could have had a scene where he was in the corner of a room just curled up in a ball rocking back and forth and crying because he's all alone.
Just some small stuff like that. I'm thinking about 10 different scenes give or take a couple and then you can loop it from there.
~ Audio ~
The audio that you picked wasn't the best quality. Sounds like the mic he was using wasn't the best, but again it isn't terrible. Like I mentioned before the lips weren't synced the best with the voices so that is really the only place where the audio can be improved in this submission at all.
~ Overall ~
A short loop that needs some more complex animations and some more content before I would consider it good. It looks like you have decent skills all around though so you shouldn't have problems improving and making something like this better. Keep on working and you will keep on improving. Hope some of the ideas I gave you helped. :)
Thanks for taking the time and effort to give such a detailed and wonderful critic. Your review will help me a lot in the future. 10/10 for this review!!! :-D
Dog is cool and that guy looks dumb.
Not bad but it's very short and looks simple
Ha ha ha... ya the guy looks dumb cuz he lost everything in life lol. Thanks for the review.
Nice and simple, and the white background makes it look simple. But it's not interesting or visually stimulating. :/
Thanks. Simplicity is the best policy. Thanks for the review :-D
Really? Thanks so much!! :-D
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