Score: 6
"Fun flash, with some dodgy grammer."
date: July 19, 2009
Not too bad, it's nice and colorful , so it's gets away with being a little basic.
It's a pity some of the English is a bit dodgy; there are a few mixed up sentences, incorrect tenses and misspellings. Maybe ask a friend to go over text before you commit it to flash, and always make sure to spell check, I should know; I'm a very clumsy speller myself!
A hearty 6 I suppose,
+1 for the nice sense of "innocent fun" I get from it
-1 for the dodgy text. so... 6
oh, and I'm a fast reader, but the section at the beginning moves very quickly! some might find it hard to read. Good work in general though.
July 19, 2009
Author's Response:
haha, i expected there will be a comment like that.
ya, I need to work on my grammer.
