Score: 4

"not that entertaining"

by: slayer98567

date: July 5, 2009

dialog was kind-of funny but you know ............ you should of put subtitles and that was really short but....honestly with a plot like that how could it not be

Score: 6

"Nice..."

by: Aloname

date: July 5, 2009

That was nice but kinda boring.
I liked the idea and the dialogue was nice and kinda funny but it was very dry.
Next time try making a dialogue from human vocies and not by 'Text to speach'.
6/10 3/5. Try better next time.

Score: 3

"A fair attempt"

by: XenoDiety

date: July 5, 2009

Had you not put "Not only because I'm a bit new to flash..." I would have given this 1 star.
But I'm cutting you some slack.
A few things to point out:
A lack of animation: Lip syncing, and making one guy lift his arm is what seemed to be the very pinnacle of your animation. Try maybe, idk, having one of the guys jump in, and wave hello or something, anything to brake up the stillness.
Poor voicing: I hate computer voices with a passion, and I'm sure there a many more who do. I feel that some text bubbles would have been better then listening to that droning voice.
Boring: The biggest one for me, I honestly felt like closing it numerous times throughout it. As stated by Multihunter, It "was not at all engaging". Have them do something like, walk along while random stuff happens in the background or something.

Not entirely bad however, at least you do have some form of build up to a main joke. There's an actual point to their banter and the people are recognizable.

Listen to Blackcat2000, he's pretty much hit it on the nail for this one.

Plenty room for improvement.

Score: 9

"Hahaha"

by: MasterExploders

date: July 5, 2009

Hahaha, yea i get it;) Ok, i really laughed, that's a +. Tho the animation and the audio could be improved. But as they say, practice makes perfect, or something xD. I think you should continue animating and i'm sure one day i'll laugh my ass of when watching your masterpieces.
Cya GL
ME

Score: 1

"Not only bad animation"

by: Multihunter

date: July 5, 2009

But bad audio. You really need to make sure that the right words are said, and in the right order.

If it's going to be all a lead up to one joke, then make sure that one joke can be heard. (If possible make the one joke better too)

Not only this, but it was not at all engaging. I know that this is hard, and I don't know how it's done, but when you get something engaging, then it doesn't matter so much on the graphics and such. The best example of something engaging, but not necessarily good looking is "Kevins Sixth Birthday".