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EDIT: Accidently checked "Game" when submitting, and it's taking awhile to change to movie. SOrry about that D:
An animation done for TOFA (The Tournament Of FLash Artists) over on ABS. Links and stuff are on the menu screen. Done to the theme of "Discovering a new ability"
FOR GOD'S SAKE PLEASE READ THIS: I know my voice sounds young, please don't mention that in your review.
Also, that last scene (LITERALLY the last scene) was just made for fun as this animation needed to be a bit more well respected.
Well, let me start off by saying that that was a bizarre short. It was funny and pretty well animated.
Your faces in particular are really well done, although I must admit that the bodies are a bit lacking, and in particular I'd advise you to work on the hands and feet. A friend once told me that when judging animation, the two key things to look at are the faces and the hands. Adding hands would really help you make things far, far more impressive and the feet just look a little off to me. You can keep it simple, but keep the feet in the shape of feet, instead of just making them blobs.
Your sound design is pretty good, no worries there.
The animation of the flower falling over is a bit off, it needs an in-between or something. The extremes are just too extreme. A blurred frame or two of the flower in between the extremes will help the transition. Everything else is pretty well done.
My last bit of advice is to fool around a bit with the water. Mess around with the alpha values and maybe use a gradient in order to show depth. It just looks strange to have a guy in the water and not be able to see into the water at all. You also might want to have the guy bob up and down a bit in the water, to emphasize that he's floating.
But this short is well done. It's strange, but that doesn't make it any less entertaining. Well done!
Thanks for the constructive review. I understand what you mean by feet and hands, and I agree fully, it's just that they weren't doing much with their arms to the point where drawing hands would have just been a pest. The feet, if I'm remembering correctly for this short, wheren't shown much, but when they were, I think I gave them some sort of basic shape, similar to Homstars feet in the Homestarrunner cartoons (Shape wise). The flower falling did need some work, I thought it would make due for what it needed to be, though, so I left it as it was.
The background of the water did need something. I wanted to add some more stuff out and around, but couldn't get it to look right with the 2D perspective I used. Gradients never have looked good to me, though, so that thought wasn't very popular in my mind :P
Thanks again for the critiques :3
wow. yeah, this is why i love the real world.
Wow. and can't he swim. Luv teh other dues face near the end.
VOTE 5 BITCHES!
Dude this was a pretty creepy movie all in all. It just has an overall wierdness about it, between almost surreal, and almost funny all the time. Untill that last scene, where I just cracked up, cuz of the random faces + totally unexpected change of the face of the standing dude in the random face Oo.
Btw your voice sounds young. LoL Just KIDding ( irony )
Haha, thanks man :3
It was completely random and funny. But where did the flower go?
It floated elsewhere :3
ahahahahaha!!! that's make me laugh.Good drawer
A short film about a park bench
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