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The Never Ending Journey Collab, a flash comic created in the art forum and put together by me!
(dont worry if it doesn't load immediately, its 5.8 mb large)
It feature art from:
And of course: Jamesb1995
Original thread: http://www.newgrounds.com /bbs/topic/1024722/
I did like a decent amount of the drawings here. I liked the story at the beginning with the construction zone, but I thought the story went off too far from the original. I guess that's destined to happen in this type of thing though.
Well my main problem with this was the main layout. I think you should have increased the size of the flash document and the images themselves. A lot of the images were too small and distorted to even try to read.
Another thing was that characters seemed to appear and disappear at random. A perfect example is the Russian war veteran who appeared for two frames and was never explained. Another would be the construction workers reuniting in Paris.
Overall this was decent, I enjoyed it at some points. Other parts just confused me.
~Review Request Club
A nice show of drawing skills from across the BBS, ranging from the insightful to the downright bizarre. The main issue with this is that I think there needs to be some sort of a sister thread for discussion about this and authors are given their own chance to bounce ideas off each other before putting a submission down.
For me, the random factor was too much. I really dread to think what the result would have been if this had been launched in the General Forum :P
Aside from the more obvious issues with the drawing skills, there is the state of the layout - rather basic, being a slideshow that has only one song playing to accompany it. Perhaps you need to branch out and pick different tunes to accompany the mood of the piece, as it changes throughout. Either that or just put a selection of tunes up, so that people can chop and change as they see fit.
[Review Request Club]
(title in work)
Heh, I never knew such fun stuff went on in the Art Forum. I've never seen a submission like this, in which users created a story from their pictures. I'm more used to art collabs with just a single theme, so this was a nice change from that. My main problem with this is that you made this such a small resolution. The art's quality was compromised a few times I feel, and it would have been simple to just make this a larger resolution to get most pictures closer to their normal dimensions.
Review Request Club
It's an alright submission, I guess
It was indeed an art collab by many different people, so I won't need to comment on lack of animation.
The art as a whole was alright to the extent that even without the relatively tiny text (decently legible though... consider sans serif next time) it was almost possible to understand what was going on.
It was very random, and unfortunately, not very funny to me. It was also very long. I know it was called "The Never Ending Journey". but halfway through I was forced to stop reading and click to see if it did indeed ever end- it did. The thing is the art isn't spectacular, and the text is a pain to read paragraph after paragraph, and attempt to make sense of it.
The music isn't too bad- it's calming and sort of a good background song (maybe a little quieter). However, I don't think this piece needed to be 5.8 MB long. Perhaps next time you could choose a shorter song/loop and optimize the audio so it doesn't become so huge. Maybe you could do something about the image sizes too. Oh. Add a mute button for the music next time too, in case.
So in short, I rate this animation as an 'okay' and-
Optimize your audio/video further
Sans Serif fonts are easier to read than fonts like times new roman
Decent story though, if not a bit long =)
I didn't know that you made a flash out of this. Pretty good story. Even though I only drew one pic you included it. Thats nice. Good Art Collab.
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