Score: 6
"Hado-boom!"
date: May 31, 2009
I don't mind random explosions at all, but for a single punch line, it didn't really cut it for me. I was hoping for a little bit more. Maybe a larger build up to the punch to make it that much more effective.
Animation was pretty smooth and slick, but the voices were a little hard to hear at times. The text at the bottom was a little quick too for some of the longer sentences. I had to watch the thing three times before I got all of it. Not that it was anything important, but if you're gonna add jokes in there to read at the same time the animation is going on with voice, that's alot to concentrate on. I suggest getting the text out a little longer. It won't harm the animation because there isn't anything going on at the bottom of the screen anyway.
The ending felt suddenly chopped off. And the sudden blue colour obscured the words again. The voice and animation seemed like they were cut off a second or something. Not sure what's up with that.
This is actually a pretty old gag, and I guess you supported it a little bit with some running jokes in the text. I know this was meant to be part of the collab, but you need to make your punch line stand out abit. The boom was a little predictable because it happened so quickly with nothing in between.
And what's up with the purple hair dude in the background moving up and down a whole lot? It's kind of distracting. Once or twice is fine, but not at every background change.
Not a bad short, but could've been a whole lot better.
May 31, 2009
Author's Response:
What a long review...well I guess I should start from the top.
1. A friend of mine warned me about this too, I extended the facts at the bottom, but I guess since I am already use to what is happening in the animation, I can concentrate more on the facts, but I'll go back and fix that.
2. Some of the voices were cut off because the characters interrupt each other, but I could have made a smoother transition when editing the audios.
3. I can't say anything, but agree that the punchline could have been smaller and that I could have used something beside the Over 9000 line for an ending.
4. The purple hair dude was making the scene more alive, but I'll extend the amount of time the guy doesn't appear on screen.
Thanks for the review! :D