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May 23, 2009 | 8:50 PM EDT

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Author Comments

This is my first submission to Newgrounds. I started it over the summer and had a long break because of lack of motivation. But recently, I have been inspired by Puffballs United to get the job done. I had a lot of fun creating it and I hope you all like it. Enjoy!
(It would be really cool if people could give me some good pointers and advice on how to improve - thanks!)

Reviews


JackdabombJackdabomb

Rated 3 / 5 stars

Very good for your first submission

Summary:
The animation was fluent and very good for your first submission but the idea is overdone and cliched. Normally this involves a lot of blood so I respect the fact that you tried to keep a different style of humor. I laughed a little bit on some parts but most of them are expected jokes. Despite it being a bit unoriginal the detail was refined, the animation was good, and you look like you have a lot in store for you in the future

Break-Down:
+Somewhat original in its department: +2
+Good animation: +5
+Good detail: +5
-Reused a cliched idea: -2
-The character was a bit bland: -1

Overall: 9/15= 3/5 | 6/10

~Da Bomb Productions~
Keep up the good work. I hope this helps you or at least make you think a little bit. I encourage you to keep animating. Though 6/10 may seem like a low score it's still a 3/5 which is good; better than I get.


People find this review helpful!
thumbsupguy responds:

Thanks for the in-depth response. And yes, it did help me think a little bit. I wasn't sure what to do for this first animation, so I grabbed a cliche idea and a basic character to start with. My plan was to build my skills until it became easier to make more unique and independent animations.


silentisdeath16silentisdeath16

Rated 3.5 / 5 stars

Very nice

I loved the animation. I hope to see more of you in the future



SageofeternitySageofeternity

Rated 4 / 5 stars

Not bad at all...

but it could use more options. Examples: big trampoline, catapult, oversized slingshot, ACME-esc flying machine, etc.


thumbsupguy responds:

Hey, thanks for the ideas. I'll have to put these into consideration.


BokuWaBakaDesuBokuWaBakaDesu

Rated 4.5 / 5 stars

Good job!

For your first animation, this was really well done.

It was humorous, and I didn't even see the Freestyle bit coming, I'll make sure to watch out for cliffs that can punch me in the future. xD

The music choice was a little odd, but I liked all of them, so I didn't care.


thumbsupguy responds:

I'm glad the Freestyle caught you by surprise, that was my hope.