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May 23, 2009 | 7:21 AM EDT

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nuuwnhuusnuuwnhuus

Rated 2.5 / 5 stars

So bad it was good

You want me to be a secret agent? Hmm okay bye..

WTF xD


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OrangeSquash responds:

I'm 10 years old and this is my first ever flash. What do you want me to do? A dancing monkey on top of a skyscraper eating popcorn?


fusionerfusioner

Rated 0 / 5 stars

spend more time

spend some more time on it dont think that the line tool is god use the paint brush more and dont do the same voice for everyone and when they are talking why is thier mouth just a circle have you ever seen anyone talk like that just spend some more time on it


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OrangeSquash responds:

Thank you for your advice and I use some of your ideas in my next flash. I may even have a different person doing a voice. Thanks. Bye!


TiredPaperBoyTiredPaperBoy

Rated 0.5 / 5 stars

Painfull

It was actually quite hard to watch through all of the animation, It was crap.

I don't want to seem like an asshole, because it was obvious that you actually put effort into it. You didnt intend in spamming the portal with bollocks.

The story was a massive failure, half of the entire fucking animation was just a guy driving in a car why not just put "Later that Day" or something?

The drawing was rubbish, the only drawing tool you used was the rectangle, and circles for the 'target'... also that "Which target do I shoot?" joke, was god awfull.

The animation... well the only animation was a car driving (which the driver was just a pink hovering square but nervermind) ((more like floating as there was no visible wheel movement)) and a guy answering his brick, which was smooth, but boring.

The worst part of the flash... the voice acting... GOD! You can download sounds from the internet, not every sound effect in the ENTIRE flash has to be your own, immature sounding (No offence) voice, "DE DE DE DE DE, HELLO MOTTO" made sigh. After everytime you spoke you made a shit load of feedback/static, get a better mic.

Do these changes and you could have a passable, portal worthy flash.

Also, the blue dude... didnt he die in London 1984... but then magicly appear in London 2009.


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OrangeSquash responds:

Well I'm sorry if my flash is not very good. But you do realise that this is my first ever flash of all time and that I'm 10 years old in age? Do you?