Score: 8

"Looking good miss thing!"

by: PresidentZen

date: May 3, 2009

I know what it's like just starting, and honestly the effort put into the artwork is awesome to me. The gameplay is a little weak, but it's a good time killer. I wish there was a scoreboard of some sort, and maybe a time keeper since we have to last a minute and a half. It's a start though! Good effort. industrial Zen keep on rocking!

Score: 6

"Much to be improved"

by: FleckoGold

date: May 3, 2009

The art not being one of them. Seriously, I admire your artwork. I can't wait to see what you can do when you animate.

I see a lot of little things that could be improved. The tentacles that come out, the direction in which the girl is facing, sound effects, score, etc. These are things that aren't really important by themselves, but if all left out, will hurt the game quite a lot.

I see a lot of potential though, maybe as you get to the end, the creature who's trying to grab you with it's tentacles comes out as sort of a boss. Then maybe also get some powerups along the way so that you can gain a more destructive weapon.

I disagree about it being too cluttered or confusing, I like the pace and the atmosphere, and the building's going by in front of you make for a good effect.

All in all, it's a game that just needs some more work done. Keep on progressing!

-Flecko-

Score: 4

"good start"

by: Nyrr

date: May 3, 2009

your illustration style is very engaging. your characters and your graffiti style typography are both working very well together. the one thing that falls apart visually is the relationship of your backgrounds to everything else. i would either simplify your characters and interface graphics to match the stylistic simplicity of the background or step up the complexity of the background in order to match everything else. also the configuration of your instructions page needs work. it's too wordy and the type is too small to read.

I'm not much of a coder myself, so i can't help a whole lot there but the gameplay feels solid enough. maybe just slow it down a little.

in terms of animation, i would just look around the portal and perhaps at tutorial sites like lindy.com to try to find inspiration/technical help. bitey of brackenwood would be a great animation to look at for inspiration if you arent already familiar. i wish i could offer you more technical assistance on the animation, but i know alot more about interface design than animation.

4/10 because this has potential but is, as you stated, unfinished. i hope this helps and that you don't have to put up with too much jack assery from the newgrounds community.

Score: 3

"hmm..."

by: meatmichael

date: May 3, 2009

i don't like the gamplay and and the movie in the beginning so i cant give at more there was not a awsome thing in it..

Score: 4

"Very confusing"

by: someguy49

date: May 3, 2009

It is really hard to try to figure out what is going on in this game. One minute you are flying through the air, the next you get plowed by a big rock while bubbles are floating all around you, trying to shoot some while collecting others...very visually intense!