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I think I vividly described a sensation that all men get. It happens in the morning, sometimes in the afternoon, and before bedtime. Enjoy, I will try to respond to all reviews.
Well, there were none. The font used was fairly generic and dull, and, as Corky said, a few transitions would have worked a treat. However, stay away from anything too fancy, as it tends to look tacky and unprofessional.
Possibly the only good bit. The joke was decent, but I could see something like that coming.
Where you could have used this to boost this movie a lot, you completely ignored it. There was no music at all. It would have been nice to get a sexy ambience track, and a sensual voice, like the one in the M&S ads (in England).
Didn't even have the bare bones of a good flash. Maybe the funny bone.
Hmm below are my thoughts
~ Animation/Graphics ~
This could use some animation. Simple things such as background animation of what the words are explaining kind of faded out so you can't really see what's going on so you don't totally ruin the joke. Also, some nice things like fades and transitions could probably improve this submission a bit too. I tend to over use the fade effect so if you use transitions make sure to vary them. There can be too much of a good thing sometimes.
~ Story/Content ~
Kind of gave me a smile, but not too much of one. Really in my opinion it was quite predictable. Also, it was very short. I think that if you want a submission to be successful like this then maybe you should include several of these jokes/rhymes to the submission. Just having one is kind of useless and doesn't make the submission too interesting.
Also, even though it was rather short and had a low file size I still think you should have had a preloader. If not a preloader than at least a play button. I never like it when a submission starts playing on it's own.
~ Audio ~
None at all and this was really the biggest downfall of this submission. There were quite a few downfalls, but this was by far the biggest. You should have included nice sensual background music and a sensual female voice (maybe could get away with a guy since it was suppose to be about a man receiving oral sex anyway).
~ Overall ~
Needs some basic animation and transitions, more jokes/length, and background music and voices.
~ Review Request Club ~
-the flash icon was misleading
-no attempt of flash
-no voice acting
- The fact that this flash was disappointing and far from a flash movie made me lower the score.
- If you do the above things and totally start again with the flash, you may have a chance.
- I am giving you 0/10 stars and voting 0
I'm really sorry
ot a bad joke
But sadly, it would have had more justice if you made this as an animated gif for another site. or maybe if you whored it on the forums here.
Not What I was Hoping for
-not a bad joke
I wouldn't really call this a movie. The joke gave me a little chuckle, but JUST a little chuckle. There was no voice work done for the text, and there was no preloader. I understand the file size was small enough for no preloader, but it just kept on looping. A swing and a miss sorry.
Blue Pencilmate meets Red Pencilmate, but things don't go so well...
While taking the day off work, Lloyd and Glynis take in a movie
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