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Apr 20, 2009 | 10:28 PM EDT
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While you load, feel free to read these comments, and also check out the collaborators' sites down below for more great work.
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THANKS FOR YOUR REVIEWS! After receiving over 350, I CAN'T PROMISE I'LL RESPOND TO NEW REVIEWS! I'll try!

Here is the Newgrounds Flash version of "A Bid for Freedom".

It is a story that I wrote and converted into a small fable with images provided by the talented Nacho Rodriguez (who created Mr. Coo and won the #1 slot in Cold Hard Flash's Best Animated) and lush watercolours by his girlfriend Cecilia Deshayes.
It is an illustrated storybook, narrated for your pleasure by the debonair Andy Dennis, with guest turns by Sasuya and Josh "Tomamoto" Tomar you HAVE to hear!
The Storybook route was pursued so it could enter ReNaeNae's excellent Storybook Collab;
http://www.newgrounds.com /bbs/topic/1003968 Talents in writing, art, voice, sound, code etc. should give it a look!

To turn the pages, hover your mouse pointer over the bottom corner of the page, then left-click and drag the page across with your mouse until it fully flips over.
Narration starts on each page as you view it, but you're free to read at your own pace (you can right-click and select "Zoom In", then drag around to see all the fine details).

This story is NOT an attempt at hair-pin-bend trigger-happy balls-to-the-wall FBF hentai-maniac game-parodying shenanigannary. NO REALLY, IT'S NOT!
The power here is in the words and the pictures.
There is COMEDY, ACTION, DRAMA and ROMANCE, all skewed at odd angles.
There's fantasy, exotic locations, body odour, and even a fast car if you stick with it!
Have patience, we've many things to offer you. Stick with us. We're a good group.

Please vote and review showing respect to the combined talent and hard work involved in this Flash. A lot of passion went into this just for you guys, so be fair.
Critique, constructive criticism, suggestions, these are things we graciously accept.
If you vote or review abusively, you let Newgrounds down. Don't.
If this is "not your sort of thing" or you're somehow disappointed by the lack of animation, this is not the fault of anyone involved; no-one's forcing you to watch!

With all this in mind, we hope you enjoy (with your drink or snack of choice) our hard work, vote and review responsibly... and may your day be brighter.

For more awesome while you wait, check out:
www.mistercoo.com (Nacho's site)
ceciliadeshayes.blogspot. com (Cecilia's blog)
www.ediblecastle.com (home to Andy Dennis and his mate Will)
www.scarymarymedia.com (earlier collaborative efforts between me, a mate of mine and Nacho, including an award-winning short for the Marbella Film Festival)

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This section is for the creative people out there:

This has been a hot coal in my hands for quite some time, burning with collective passion, yet I've been reluctant to throw it into the fire.
Enough people are happy with the results as they stand for me to go forth and submit it.
Trust that this will blossom over time as we come back to better adorn this work.

My preliminary thanks are on this page:
http://www.newgrounds.com /bbs/topic/1049617/3

I additionally thank DrNeroCF for saving us in the coding department and Deathcon for further help; Joey Young (http://joeymofo.newgroun ds.com) for providing sound effects at short notice and the Very Odd House (http://www.theveryoddhou se.com/) for a small snippet of lush score; and to Josh Tomar, introduced late into the project yet he delivered an outstanding performance within minutes of me asking him.
Further thanks go to the Newgrounds Team for their support of this work, and to all Newgrounds users who do the same (including Mr GUS, who is highly underrated: be sure to see his latest http://www.newgrounds.com /portal/view/483436 and vote for it in this year's Treasure Hunt).
Any other great participants that come to light will be remembered here equally.

Cheers!

Reviews


toonyfatninjatoonyfatninja

Rated 5 / 5 stars

great job man

take to hollywood it's promising. if curios jorge did then yours will pass with flying colors i would go see if it hit the big screen


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BeneFedaykinBeneFedaykin

Rated 4.5 / 5 stars

Wonderful!

The effort really shows, great job. The art was fantastic, the voices suberb, and the story as lavishly written as it was original and abstract. The sound effects were a nice touch too, though the car at the end dragged on a bit past what it probably should have. One good rev should be sufficient.

Others have commented on the page turning breaking the flow of the piece and I would say that I have to agree. I don't like to hop on top of another's comments, but I feel that it is very important to maintain the readers absorption in the piece and manually dragging each page broke me from my immersion in the narrative. That said, seeing the pages flip was a nice touch. Maybe the two could be resolved by a quick, page-turning animation/script activated by the reader clicking the corner rather than dragging it? Just a suggestion.

Other than that, it was a very solid start to what will hopefully result in some more artistic collaborative submissions to NG. This piece is a shining example of what can be accomplished by a cooperative effort from talented and willing individuals. Keep up the good work, I look forward to more...


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Rick95051Rick95051

Rated 4.5 / 5 stars

Ground-breaking Work!

Honestly ranks up there with the best this site has to offer, and quite possibly the whole flash community. It was completely original yet representative of others' styles at the same time. The vocabulary added to the charm without being pretentious and the artwork was beautifully done. A little slow to start, as I was able to draw your point from all the descriptive fluff in the beginning with the first few frames, but the jokes, which were well spaced and presented, kept it driving. Overall, a very professional and outstanding piece.

Just a few recommendations to make. If you wanted to follow the book type of flash, do so without making the viewer turn the page. I felt the continuity was disrupted by having to turn the page myself. Having to do this, especially in the beginning seemed like a huge hassle and broke my focus. As people have mentioned, the text was hard to read in spots and could have been repositioned possibly so it was legible without having to cover up too much of the pretty artwork. Also, I feel you broke the air of the writing style between Babs and the chandler decent and on towards the end. However, these are just personal gripes.

Like I said, a beautiful and greatly presented piece. Well done!


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Jestercap13Jestercap13

Rated 5 / 5 stars

wow very charming

lol, its like a children's book but one i would read lol. this was very well done, ive never seen anything quite like it on newgrounds. nice work.


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AdamCook responds:

Hahaha, always pleased to interest people in new things. Thank you for your nice review!


SleazeSleaze

Rated 4.5 / 5 stars

I heard a fly buzz-- when I died

In spite some jank similes (i.e.as blue as dolphin tears) and volume spikes (in between characters) I adore everything about this work. The story, the art, and the voice acting where all great. I caught several allusions in the writing including Emily Dickenson, Rudolf the Red Nose Reindeer, and Donkey Kong.

I hope that this will become a new collaborative standard for Newgrounds.


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AdamCook responds:

Hey, there, nice commentary! Finally some criticism aimed at me rather than the technical issues I know too well about!

The "jankyness" of the similes are partly intended; it became so ridiculous trying to think of one-upping descriptive qualities for her ("a dress spun from the finest silk of 1000 spiders", for example, would have been considerably less useful) that I decided to go for complete camp instead. (I mean, surely you didn't think "shone like the centre of an Oreo" was a great romantic declaration!!! Hahahahaha!) Plus, it managed to convey something visually interesting that Nacho + Ceci picked up on and ran with gusto (notice the teardrop pattern on her dress).
I'm happy with your comment, though; it's a personal thing, writing, and we all have different views on the values it should uphold. On this work I tried to make something with heart but also with humour; I'm pleased with what I delivered and glad that in the main it worked for you.

As for the volume spikes; good call, no-one's mentioned that yet but I've had a sneaking suspicion. Some of the characters are meant to be a bit loud, but I could probably do a better mix in the studio. Cheers for a helpful critique!

The references were fairly incidental (although I am the biggest fan of video games), and though I get the Emily D reference you pointed out, I don't see this having much to do with her take on the spiritual rot that comes with death. Flies get around in all the media, you know! As a side note though, when Joey was providing some of the sound effects, he did offer me a fly buzz I'm sure was from the IHAFBWID animation (short and fantastic piece of work http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DzK0mQ ER28A). It was too surreal for this... sounded very eerie.

Naturally I hope that more people start combining their talents for increased benefit: many people could deliver so much more with a good team. I also hope that we start to attract more writing, artistic, vocal, audio and programming talents of the calibre witnessed here, so that we can raise the collective standard on what constitutes a great submission.

Most importantly though, I hope we start attracting more viewers like you, who appreciate what we're trying to do and welcome us with such open arms. Thank you very much!