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A man waited no more. One day his conscience finally tells him, it is time to revenge.
Confused, though the way the scenes were set up was quite cool, and the beginning was pretty epic too.
Some more use of shades, and less bass in the music, as well as some extra length and maybe a flashback of why he wants the revenge would've helped a lot.
I do have a thing for the stickman art style, but the story made little discernable sense to me. I assume that was intentional? Anyways, you might try to tone down the music on the submission, it's coming through a bit distorted on the low bass parts (again, intentional?)
Anyways, consider giving us some backstory on this piece so that it isn't so confusing.
I liked your short story even though I didnt like the content
like the style, could hav gone for a bit longer but to be honest, its nothing different.
Too basic but..
Your scenes were well "designed", they were fluid and interesting, they fitted the action.. like a movie.
However, it was too short, too confusing to understand what was what, since there were only black and white mass with no shading.
guy drains his main vein.
The first episode of my original anime
Two Men Fight to the Death!
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