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This was made as a speed animating exercise, and because I wanted to try my hand at something melodramatically cool, rather than funny, for once.
I think it turned out pretty well, actually.
And yeah, there's a lot of plot holes and lack of continuity, but just enjoy it. I command it of ye!
pretty cool i liked that lil hiss thing you put in here
it was quite good! especially for 10 days work..
- the flag at the start.. maybe have that constantly moving in the wind.. rather than jus that once. (make the flag a movie clip.. that way, it will keep looping untill the movie clip is no longer there.)
- voice actors. alot more difficult to get decent voice actors but nicer than text
- also more frequent sound cus when there was sound.. it seemed a bit odd. another thing could be some music theres lots of songs on ng that would fit something like this quite well
these are things im just pointing out.. i know it was a speed animation so i wasnt expecting everything to be in it. overall = cool =]
Thanks for the comment.
I did worry a bit about the sudden sound.
Also, in my house its very difficult to get a moment of silence to record voices, and its even harder to get other people to voice act.
But thankyou for constructive critism, I'll use more movieclips in the future
but im going to have to agree with a lot of others...
some voices, a little music, and some colour would go a long way. i think you've got the outline of a front page submission here.
i really hope you improve this!!!
Thankyou, that's very encouraging!
could of been beetter but not bad overall try to make it into a series or something add some color
It was a speed animating exercise, the point was to be as quick as possible.
Therefore, I didn't use any colour.
But thanks for the good review!
i agree, you should make more color and maybe better the graphics, get some voice actors and such.
it would turn into front page material in not time^^
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