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This is my third proper flash animation. I'm mainly just trying lip syncing here. I'll be expanding this when I'm not so busy.
Any critical or constructive advice is welcome.
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So literal...... lol
:D thank you!!!
Next time make like a compilation of short flashes, that would be sweet action.
I never actually thought about doing that... Genius!!
Thanks for the tip, Dude! I'll keep that in mind. :D
My humor :3
WOW! A 10??
Well I can honestly say that I wasn't expecting this. Cheers!
Short, simple, but it's my kind of humor. XD
Thanks, dude! Much appreciated! :D
I like the concept
But the execution needs a little work. For one thing, the audio could use some beefing up. If you're ripping off skin, it's gonna make a noise. In order to push the concept, you should really add a ripping noise, maybe some grunting... you know, the works. Use your imagination.
The lip synching is fine. It works. It's nothing spectacular, but it gets the job done.
But really, you should try and have a bit more fun with the animation. When the guy starts ripping, you might want to try having him cringe. Experiment with the faces. If he struggles a bit more, it pushes the joke further. He could twist and turn, try and get a new grip, maybe he reaches a point where it gets stuck and he pulls out some scissors or something to finish the job. If you're going to go macabre, you might as well push it. As a finisher, maybe his organs could fall out? Something like that?
If you want to have him keep smiling, then push it further. Make him the sociopath that he seems to be. Push the smile, make it a bit more psychotic. He could show some gums, clench his teeth, open his mouth, stick out his tongue, start chewing on his tongue (I can see him struggling so hard that he bites his tongue off, that'd be pretty funny). The point is that you need to push it further.
Lastly, you might want to add a background or something. Just a gradient would add a lot. Music isn't necessary with a piece this short, but you can add a background in like no time flat and it would really help.
Thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you THANK YOU!!
I will keep allot of this in mind. The only exception might be the background. The flash is based off of a webcomic I make, and this webcomic generally only has the three colours: white, black and red. If I added too much depth, it would defeat the abstract, geometric purpose of the comic/flash. If you have any further advice on how to create background with this concept in mind, it would be appreciated muchly. :D
But thanks again for the advice!!
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