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Well this is my first flash uploaded to new grounds, so id appreciate it if you went easy on it. Its a pretty short flash and there isnt much of a storyline but if its liked ill make a sequel explaning more.So yeah hope you all enjoy.
epic, i cant wait for the next episode.
LOL, i cant believe you wrote a review. thanks
This is great for your first submission , keep submitting stuff like this!
For your first flash this isn't half bad, at least compared to some of the flashes that come up... but anyways it defiantly needs some work. Slackman gives lots of good advice with how to improve.
Yeah i read it,Thanks for the review
Not bad in fact
I like it cause its cool, but its too big! And too short. But its ok for the first time! Make more and we will give you more points.
Go easy on you?
I'm going to start off by saying that the sound design was pretty good. The animation on the other hand, was not. If you really want to impress people, you have to put in that extra effort. For example, at the beginning, when he's walking around with the flashlight, maybe have something being revealed by the flashlight, rather than just showing us a triangle of light. Take advantage of masking layers. For that matter, put something in the background for us to see. Even a few pipes would add some much needed atmosphere.
When the blood hits the wall, it flickers and moves around in strange ways. Take a glass of juice and throw it at a wall or something along those lines, take note of what happens. It'll give you a good idea of what blood hitting a wall will look like.
The guns look pretty good, but the animation of the human creature things does not. Take a look at your foot, I'm sure it doesn't look like a circle. That doesn't mean that you can't simplify your foot, but it's kind of a slope with a flat bottom right? Use that, it'll make things look better.
On top of that, this is probably just a personal peeve here, but seeing a character with no arms or legs strapped up like that looks kind of silly. If you're going for horror, you should remember that the essence of horror is that your audience needs to relate to your victim. The more realistic you make him, the better off you will be. I'm sorry, but a circle with hair just isn't all that interesting for a head.
There are several tutorials on this very site that demonstrate how to do proper walking and make it look better. Take a look at them. If you insist on using characters without limbs, watch Krinkle's Madness series and watch how his characters move. I'm not necessarily saying that you should copy him, but rather that you should see what he does right and work off of it.
Anyway, this certainly isn't the worst first flash I've ever seen. For a first one, it isn't too bad, and I hope this advice helps you with the sequel.
Well thanks for not being a total asshole about the review.Ill take it into consideration.
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