Score: 10
"Good..."
date: February 14, 2009
4 things I spotted:
The final attack was kind of lame.
Some spacing errors (probably not your fault)
Um... is it me, or when Dark Sonic got attacked by Shadow, Dark Sonic was moving forward?
Dark Sonic is completely black; the only thing that is not black is the white of the eye, the pupil and Sonic's hands.
And to the guy who said there was no story, the story is that Amy got hurt/killed by Shadow and Sonic wants revenge. It's a short exposition and the good stuff occurs in the rising action/climax.
The fight should have been longer though. Well whatever...
There's still room for improvement. Keep trying!
February 15, 2009
Author's Response:
I am thankful for your review, and yes, It had a LOT of mistakes. But hey, its only my third! XD I am doing some great improvemenet even if I say so. And yeah, it was rushed, 2 days to do this! XD thanks for all the feedback, and I think this would deserve like a 7-8. Its still progress...