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This is my VERY first flash animation and so please be kind, and tell me what i could improve on.
NOTE: just to let you know this animation contains no-
nor an ending. so it keeps looping.
and i mean it, please be nice, i really want to animate in flash but when people just seem to hate my animations.. well... it puts me down so then im not motivated.
Wow thanks for all the tips! i apreciate it an... omg is that a 10 rating? that unexpected THANK YOU!! ^.^
This was really good in fact this was great a few words though try making the stickmen in a smaller paint brush so you can diinguish them better, try adding some color to your characters you know so we can keep track of whose who and finaly i know this is your first flash but before you submit your next one please take a good hour or so and make a Main menu. People dont think a main menu isnt impotant but it can really add some luster to your animation. I hope you dont take all of this badly im just trying to help im an stick fight animator myself....so keep on animating youve got a knack for this sorta thing...
truth is i used to be a pivot animator, so i know how to animate well.. im just not really good at drawing :(
Good for a first attempt
The animation wasn't choppy at all, although the text was hard to read and I had a hard time figuring out what was going on :P. Slow it down just a tad, so the text is readable and the viewer can get a sense of what is happening. I will have to say this is much better than what I had produced as a first flash animation. Keep practicing, try some tutorials and your skills will improve!
Not good not horrible. slow it down so people can read it better. and plz make it longer then i will give much better review.
For being your first flash, I'm actually pretty impressed. Of course it needs sound, and could be longer, but the animation is very smooth and well put together. As far as critiques go, it would probably help to slow down the action just slightly, and make the stick figures a little thinner so it doesn't seem so cluttered. Other than that, keep working on it; I definately see some potential here.
not the worst
this is relatively good for a first animation
the thing that put it down the most is no sound
seriously why didnt you put any? its not that hard at all
THINGS TO MAKE BETTER
faster frame rate(maybe)
more fluid animation
make it longer
and it should be good!
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