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Thanks to Corky52 for translation.
Let's start with the artwork, It was good, but I've seen better in my time. The animation was also good however there was certainly room for improvement. As for sound, no voice acting... but clicking through text boxes. The storyline for this was easy to understand, but failed to deliver upon entertainment or comical value. You had some funny jokes, but not many. Back to the sound, not even background music was present unless you were doing a certain scene. Drop by the Audio Portal and find something suitable for you.
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*Kind of Funny
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Hi, thanks. You know, too many jokes can kill the rythm.
Strange but entertaining
this was funny, i like your character designs, but this could be greatly improved with voices and such the button and text is kind of old style but it still works
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An entertaaining flash
Animation/Graphics - They could have been done a little bit better, but I do like your style a little bit. I think you should include a lot of the in between animations like the characters actually walking and everything. I think that's the thing that would improve the score of your flash the most.
Story/Content - Pretty funny in most parts. The story was pretty funny and I knew this before I even watched it since I translated it for you. Anytime you need more help you know where to get a hold of me. I think the animation part would help the story be a little smoother.
Audio - Probably could work on getting some voices in the near future or something. More sound effects would have been a little better too. My favorite part was when chipmunk and pumpkin showed up and their theme music started to play.
Overall - Good job and I'm happy to translate for you anytime.
Hi, thanks so much for all you've done.
you know in the movies...
when the cops slide the bars shut right in front of your face?
That's exactly what it's like.
-My Dad's Buddy Jeff
I don't understand.
Quite good... Not very funny.
Second-Year Animation Film (2015)
If you try eating the Mouse Cleaning Service, you gonna have a bad time...
devoted to the ambulative pleasure
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