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This is the crazy word-world. Where you can jump on your own words!
(maybe you have to watch it twice, because the text is a little fast).
Episode 1 :Becoming the word-master
I really like this :D
yea the animations aren't the best, but you did a very good job.
Animation/Graphics - A little sloppy and it's really the only place that I took out any score from your flash, but I almost like the sloppy style. It gives it a nice touch in my opinion. Could just be me on that though. :p Anyway, I like that the words were written out instead of typed. I do think that things like the house, apple, and the stickmen could have been done a bit better. Other than that it was an interesting style.
Story/Content - Hmm, a very original idea. You could build many episodes off of this simple concept of Word Jumping. Who knows, perhaps this will be a very popular series some day. I'd keep coming up with sequels if I was you. So yeah, mega bonus points for coming up with a great original idea with stick figures. I know that can be hard to do.
Audio - Nice background music that you used, but I do think that sound effects could have helped the flash a little better. Stuff like, "Ugghhh" when the stickmen got hit or crashing noises when words were being broken or when they were falling. I don't think you should add voices though as that would obviously defeat the whole purpose of the flash.
Overall - Work on your artwork and animation just a little bit and you could make some popular flashes.
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Thanks for your review
It was the helpfullest so far :D
I'll appricieate your review.
and im working on more sequels!
I see why you put this in the Experimental Genre. You certainly have a lot to build from. Your artwork was sloppy. The stick figures were quite good however I suggest you no longer write out the words with your mouse anymore... just type them out and work from there. You have a very nice concept here and I can see this story progressing further. You just need to work on your artwork a little bit more. Your animation is was very well done. However there were no sound effects or background music of any kind. I suggest you stop by two different places, the Art Forum, Flash Tutorials, and the Audio Portal. If you require links to all of those then send me a PM.
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*Bad Writing - Change to a Font
Thanks for your review first!
sound will be added in ep 2.
I also improoved my writing a little but ill keep the handwriting to give it a personal touch.
hey if you want check out the preview to ep. 2 at my frontpage!
anyway thanks for ur time!
That was really good. I'm looking forward to the sequal =D.
working on it.
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