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so here is my 2nd flash.
i am uploading what i have right now because this can be a long story. if no one likes this now i know that i have to make my next part waaaaaaay better.
mario world is invaded by bowser. this part is an introduction on the story so the real action start beyond here.
i hope you enjoy this part en just like my previous submission:tips are greatly apreciated.
the only problem was that the text was a little too fast and small.
in agreement with the lower two.
same responses to those other 2 count for you;) thanks for reviewing
theres alot of potential with this, pretty awesome for your second flash. i agree with what the other guy said about the button that way the reader can go at their pace.
thanks for your review, i hope ou will like the rest of the story and i will find a way to improve it. it is thanks to you reviewers i improve quickly(don't know if you have seen my first one but those skills were horrible compared to this)
That was a little boring, but I think it's just the storyline for a great series.
1 problem, the text went to fast for me. I still understand but make them on longer in your next one.
if i can find voice actors i will change to voices, but even then i need to make talking mouths and don't know yet how to do that on sprites, but if i go for text ik will certainly make them longer in my next one or make buttons
A few small problems
Well first it looks like there will be a second one.Umm is that music stolen? cus its from . The Elder Scrolls IV: Oblivion- Made by a Bethesda(i like Bethesda. oblivion one of my fav games) i never checked if there was a download available on there site.
1. Make a button which allows the reader to go at his own pace
2. Good story and good sounds
3. Text could be a bit bigger.
4. Seems like it will be a good series(if you do make more)
Overall I think you did a pretty good job
i did not stole the music, ik bought the game fair and square and i got the music out of the game directory(yes all the music just stands there in mp3) next time i will make the text bigger and i will make more, and better. thanks for your review
i like the music and all BUT i dont like to read alot of words. so try to make them talk
i will try to look for voice actors, thanks for reviewing
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