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Dec 21, 2008 | 9:04 AM EST

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Author Comments

This is my first real flash that ive worked on for longer than an hour. I will update it with a title screen and a better first paragraph later or re-submit it with the updates should this not pass.

All sounds downloaded from soundsnap.com.

I will fix the lag tommorow and the text scene will shorten. as for o actual speech, i don't have a microphone.

Reviews


zookyman2zookyman2

Rated 2 / 5 stars

???

i thought it was good so far but it's like you only submitted half a movie. would have givin you a six if longer but man you killed it.



NothanNothan

Rated 2 / 5 stars

Rather weak.

The usage of the music was the only thing that really worked here. The animation is way too laggy, it almost looked as if it had only 1 frame per second. I'm not an expert in flash, but you have to find a better way of animating than that. Unfortunately, the story is very pointless and unoriginal, too.
I think as a first attempt this may be OK, but you have to work seriously if you want to do good flash movies.


MasteRat133 responds:

i know, im an actually good drawer in real life. if im lucky, my friend could lend me that thing where you draw with a special pen, anyways the mouse is too hard to animate with. if i decide to buy one of those pen and pad things, or helends it to me, i can put some great detail in it


Supman914Supman914

Rated 3 / 5 stars

Well it was ok

But it still could use alot more action and the paragraphs could be over with a little more quickly i mean it dosent take us like 2 minutes to read that u know wut i mean but anyways good improvement from ur last one



Potato-ina-BunPotato-ina-Bun

Rated 0.5 / 5 stars

lame

this is beraly an animation, more of a fps.

the text scene was too long, the animation looked LAGGY.
any way, preety lame.. try to give the motions more frames



resi117resi117

Rated 1.5 / 5 stars

not bad

cu do with alot more action, talkingnot speech bubbles, and defo better sound bu nice try on ya first attempted :)