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Dec 21, 2008 | 9:04 AM EST

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This is my first real flash that ive worked on for longer than an hour. I will update it with a title screen and a better first paragraph later or re-submit it with the updates should this not pass.

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I will fix the lag tommorow and the text scene will shorten. as for o actual speech, i don't have a microphone.



Rated 2 / 5 stars December 26, 2008


i thought it was good so far but it's like you only submitted half a movie. would have givin you a six if longer but man you killed it.


Rated 2 / 5 stars December 21, 2008

Rather weak.

The usage of the music was the only thing that really worked here. The animation is way too laggy, it almost looked as if it had only 1 frame per second. I'm not an expert in flash, but you have to find a better way of animating than that. Unfortunately, the story is very pointless and unoriginal, too.
I think as a first attempt this may be OK, but you have to work seriously if you want to do good flash movies.

MasteRat133 responds:

i know, im an actually good drawer in real life. if im lucky, my friend could lend me that thing where you draw with a special pen, anyways the mouse is too hard to animate with. if i decide to buy one of those pen and pad things, or helends it to me, i can put some great detail in it


Rated 3 / 5 stars December 21, 2008

Well it was ok

But it still could use alot more action and the paragraphs could be over with a little more quickly i mean it dosent take us like 2 minutes to read that u know wut i mean but anyways good improvement from ur last one


Rated 0.5 / 5 stars December 21, 2008


this is beraly an animation, more of a fps.

the text scene was too long, the animation looked LAGGY.
any way, preety lame.. try to give the motions more frames


Rated 1.5 / 5 stars December 21, 2008

not bad

cu do with alot more action, talkingnot speech bubbles, and defo better sound bu nice try on ya first attempted :)