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Sigh... Well, I just made this to amuse my dad, and ended up putting it on here. it is bad. constructive criticism welcome. I WILL GET A LOT OF CRITICISM, THOUGH MOST WON'T BE VERY CONSTRUCTIVE. Oh, and that's an eye. YUMMY.
Cool, but random.
Very, very random. D:
A silly concept.
I found this to be pretty amusing. It could have used some sound, but it got a point across. The girl's reaction was really funny when the eyeball came flying at her. The animation was good and the plot was simple. I hope your dad liked it, I sure did. You are talented at making shorts like this. You could show this to little kids to teach them about this valuable lesson. Keep up the great work!
Wow thanks! My dad thought it was hilarious, glad you did to! I don't think I'm as great as you said, but I think I would really get my point across to the little children. I didn't have any sounds when I made this, but now I do :)
Thanks for the great review man.
Doing my best not to flame you right now
I really don't get the point of this movie? What the hell were you trying to accomplish besides "entertaining your dad?" Do you even think this was worth submitting to the portal? Ask yourself that, and when you get an answer tell. Anyway, there was no sound to this at all. Even as short as it is, it really does need some sound. Whether it's corny music or a thump sound when the guy got hit with (what the fuck was that anyway?). Don't you know that the real thing to worry about when creating a flash movie is the sound and originality? And the eye...what the fuck was up with that shit? So it hit her in the face and she threw up...I get it, yet I don't. It has absolutely no plot line and quite frankly, serves no purpose in the NG portal. Also, improve your drawing, it looks like scribble...or something. I could barely make out the background, like what the fuck was that shit? On a closing note, just try improving in every area you can think of: sound, plot, graphics, etc etc. When you feel you really did make something decent, submit it to the portal then and hope it doesn't get blammed.
very constructive criticism. There was nothing to accomplish, just some test animation to 'entertain my dad'. Since it isn't blammed, maybe it is worth submitting. I know there isn't sound, as i just said, it was a test. It was a car, btw. Not everything needs a plot, and the background was done quickly in under a minute. I know i need to improve a lot, thanks for the criticism. If thats what your like not trying to insult someone, It's scary to think what your like when you do try.
Made me smile :)
If you added sound and a little more detail on the background it might be better :D
Also, add some ease to that eye tween; btw no one throws up with their eyes open x3
Well good luck with your animations~
There was no tween- all FBF. Thanks for the review, glad to hear you smiled at it. And i guess your right, normal human beings usually have there eyes closed when they puke.
It's a start...
Unfortunately, it suffers from the following:
1. The perspective. There is none. I had to see it again because it looked like something dropped on his head.
2. No sound.
3. Too short.
There's my constructive criticism. The animation was decent, the character movement wasn't that bad. But overall, it's missing quite a bit.
Thanks! Yea, the only thing I've been working on for the passed few days is animation. I haven't been working on perspective, or finding good sounds. Thanks for the review and criticism, I'll try working on my movies with those in mind!
The return of Dr. Bees!
Goling about and preventing things.
He was working in a whip shop in Flushing, Queens...
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