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Dec 7, 2008 | 9:54 PM EST

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My second flash. After an eight month haitus due to a bad computer I decided to familiarize myself with flash again on a new computer, alongside practicing using sound effects and whatnot. Created while looking for inspiration at 2 in the morning. This was the result.
Six and a half hours.
1703 Frames
59 Layers

Reviews


Kego-thundergodKego-thundergod

Rated 5 / 5 stars

nice

Very Noir, I like it. I understand the message I love it lol. I see people think your a maniac, but thats unfounded. I mean rappers and can spew lyrics about beating their wifes to death and they go double platinum, you make a true work of art and are looked down upon for it.
I congratulate you, this is a very good piece of art. Your animation needs some work obviously, but you can't expect to much with a mouse. I'd like to illicit a little conversation about how you got your inspiration for this movie. Coulda been a little longer, but it's a great short! I hope this gets an award it's truly wonderful, while slightly esoteric, but thats alright all true works of art are, i was going to watch this last night but didn't have the time for it. Sadly, I sincerely regret that. Anyway Congratulations again. Please... continue to make flash. I think maybe i just found the first artist I'd like to add to my favorites.



mysticmonkey2mysticmonkey2

Rated 4 / 5 stars

I can see talent

You can clearly tell a story well, and it is a good story, that aspect of this animation I loved. You had a perfect atmosphere going that made the animation awesome. The only problem I see is that you havn't got the same talent with animation, but that's something that you can work on, look around at a few tutourials and learn about animation. I think if you really put yourself into improoving your skills with animation you could have a seriously brilliant flash made.



desertmissile17desertmissile17

Rated 4 / 5 stars

Pretty creepy

I thought it pretty well done but it did give me the chills after watching it. It seems so selfish that the character in your animation could do something like that for his own inspiration at the cost of someone else. Almost like he went through a mid-life crisis and snapped. None the less I like it. Keep up the good work and maybe offer a little more insight as to what your character is thinking or if he has any second thoughts/ internal conflict about his decisions.


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jenna1931jenna1931

Rated 4 / 5 stars

good idea

I find your story interresting, but I have a little recommendation to make: let the text showed a little longer or have it read "off camera". To make it easy, it's recommended that you let the text showed twice the time you need to read it. English is my second language and because it's a flash, there's no pause button to give me enough time to read it.
I'd too suggest you to create a replay button at the end, or insert the newgrounds loader at the beginning, just to not have an automatic loop.

You did a nice job for a second flash
*2 thumbs up*



LookLeftLookLeft

Rated 3.5 / 5 stars

Cold in winter

At first I didn't know what to think. The preamble takes a bit long, but once the story gets going it's truly chilling. It's not often you see people trying to tell serious stories, much less haunting ones.

There's a real problem visually. The art can't carry the story- the stick figures can't be taken seriously and lack the impact need to translate the plot into a visual story. And, a small gripe, the typewriter 'text' scenes are a little difficult. Give the viewer a little more time to read what was said and maybe put a highlight over the new portions of text to better direct the eye.

This was something good, and you should keep creating.