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Dec 7, 2008 | 8:03 AM EST

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Author Comments

This is my first decent length animation completed in Flash. I did it for a school project; took me a really long time. Planned out with story boards and everything. It's based on a short story I wrote for English a while back. It was going to be longer with a few more complications but I stupidly left it a little late so I had to cut it a bit short.

I hope to do more animations in the future but for now, enjoy.

Any constructive criticism is welcome.



Rated 4.5 / 5 stars

Really nice

Really well drawn, and nicely animated

it deserves more views than this, you should try submitting it to youtube if you haven't already, I've had more success with animations there

Keep it up

Madtav44 responds:

Thanks for the kind review. I may just try Youtube.


Rated 3.5 / 5 stars

Like it.

Nice smooth animation, and a fine job synching the dialogue. I'd like to hear some background music or ambience though. Too much silence makes me feel something's missing.

All in all positive I'd say. And crime doesn't pay!

Madtav44 responds:

Thanks for the review.

There actually is some ambience sound. Maybe I should make it louder, or maybe your speakers weren't turned up. Either way, I'll check it out.


Rated 4 / 5 stars

a bit too long for my personal likes

the animation was good, sound was matched nicely, it's very impressive. Congrats.


Rated 3 / 5 stars

Animation was fine.

It didn't WOW me but it was fine. I think you made this very well but the story needed work. Slow dramatic scenes don't really work in a comedy... I hope you do make another. But a longer one with more to it.


Rated 5 / 5 stars


Very Nice, Animations were smooth sleek and shiney. Sounds were great and the end was funny.

Make some more Steve.

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