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Hmm

Well, it's not the greatest flash I've ever seen, but that means you've got a good scope to work with in the development of the project as a whole.

I think that you need to try looking at the lyrics and seeing what it visualises - present some sort of story through the lyrics and the music - animate a story and not just present the words to us all with the occasional picture of hearts and eyes.

I think that working on the drawing aspect would help as well - zoom in and spend more time tidying up the pieces that you're drawing, as it would make a huge difference to the piece. That and picking two colours for the text and background that wouldn't clash so badly.

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ehh...

Not great, the colours went poorly with the background and kind of stung in my eyes, also the text and imagery was poorly written/drawn, and looked messy. It was in sync though and kind of made sense. Try again with something better.

Kind regards -
Sirtom93.

I'm blind ^^

Ow my eyes. Man even now that I'm done watching this submission my eyes still hurt a little. The colors together are a bad choice. I rather see a black background and perhaps white letters or something like a light blue backgrounds, which more compares to the color of the sky instead of the color that you used here. Red and blue, while still awesome colors, just don't work together that well. Now orange and blue work awesome. (The Denver Broncos fan talking in me =P) Perhaps some of this flash wasn't your fault, but it's still things to think about for future references.

I also recommend instead of using any text at all that you use animations to represent something from the song. Whether it be you looking up the real music video to this and making a remix of it in your own style or just making up the stuff by yourself. While alright to listen to this submission wasn't really anything fun to watch at all. Not only because of the colors, but watching text just isn't that exciting. Anyway, it just needs some work and you're on the right path. Keep up the work.

Bad color choice

Good things first: The synching was done great! The words and the drawings went along perfectly with the music/the lyrics.

The bad things: The color choice is just awful! It's impossible for the human eye to focus both colors at the same time (because blue has a significantly shorter wavelength than red), so it's very straining for the eyes to watch this flash.

Also, most time the flash just contained written words. Ok, the title is "I stay away lyrics" and you wrote down the lyrics. But I really don't need to watch this flash to find out the lyrics of this song.
You added some drawings from time to time, which is a good idea. Sadly, it was a bit hard to make out what it was that you where drawing there. You should try to use a smaller tool and the zooming function for your drawings. It gives you much better control over what you are doing.

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Heh...

Not half bad.

You did pretty well with drawing the words, and they went right along with the song too. I always like these things 'cuz if I can't understand tha words through sound, I can understand it through the words written there.

btw: I thought your name looked familiar. When I checked your old submissions, I noticed a couple of L7C submissions! Long time no see mang!

ALSO: You started this in THE MIDDLE OF SUMMER?? Wow, so were you really busy IRL, or just not paying attention to this/lazy?

Anyways, glad to see you submitted again!

Overall:
5/5 ; 9/10
~darknessdweller