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Is my first animation in this page. I hope you enjoy it.
so funny =)
I've been a fan of the first Paper Mario game for quite a while. Even though I didn't find the humor all that clever, your animation talent is very nice considering it's your first one. Keep it up!
Not bad at all
Few things wrong, but overall it was quite good. Your animation is awesome for a first flash. Even though some of the characters weren't actually in the plot (i.e the other toads) they still moved around as if they were real-ish..
Anyway, the animation speed for some things could be upped a few notches. Like the walk cycle and the falling wing. Your English just needs some work. But overall this was a good flash.
Great job for first, but practice more!
Your animation is excellent for a beginner, and you don't need to work so much in that area, although the movement is kind of slow.
The biggest problem, though, is the subtitles. If you're not completely fluent in English, that's understandable, but as one of the other reviewers, R00k, said, you should have somebody read over it and give you some advice about it.
The comedy was pretty funny, especially when Peach said that Luigi isn't invited. However, you don't need too much swearing to make it enjoyable, or at least in this type of flash. It's definitely understandable to use it in some places (again, with the Luigi incident), but try not to use it so much.
All in all, it was another decent Mario flash, and it looks like you have some potential, so I hope to see another episode sometime soon!
very very nice
just going to start this off with saiding im a director and i noticed a few things about this flash that would have made it better try using these for next time.
1. in the jungle scene where it was two years later, you should have given luigi a full beard to show the audience how long he has actually been there in the jungle, just little things like that can change the whole scene around. if you used sprites just add on to them
2. try to aviod unessasary scenes like when luigi was holding up the gun at toad
3. try the FPS rate fast at maybe 30 to keep it at a fast pace
im going to finish with saying that this is a very good first flash better than mine was and i think you have a future in animation, for your next episode try to add in voice acting if you want help on how to do that just PM me good stuff
Brendon Director of Film and Animation
HBO starts targeting children!
What place? Earth!
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