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This was called "Deadly Disaster on Dark Street", but I shortened the name. Well, this is my first movie. Enjoy. Sorry for no audio.
Go here to view the story (remove spaces):
ht tp :// asteinborn 78. ej. am/ story_ 1. pdf
UPDATE: The text was unreadable. That is fixed.
UPDATE 2: Added sound, added in fleeing.
I looked at it for a cpl of secounds
Its a zoomed out pdf file. Put something in it for me to criticise please. What was that animation ?
i agree with falariem
how the hell DID this pass judgement?
you get 0 for everything just cuz its not readable
humor possible but couldn't read text
plot was possible but couldn't read text
character develp was possible but couln't read text
also animation was at a level under decency, too fast for the normal newgrounds watcher to catch attention too. larger script, smoother animation and this could be good
will be fixed!
Way too fast! way too small! way too short!
How the hell did this pass judgement?
Why would you ask?
This sucked. The words were too small, it went too fast, animation was bad, and it was boring.
goin' be... longer... with sound.
critique= its too fast and short
it'll be slow and a bit longer.
What to expect when you're expecting (an acceptance letter)
Some magic frog BEATS!
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