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Oct 11, 2008 | 1:50 PM EDT

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HELLO EVERYONE , PLEASE DO RATE THIS VIDEO I AM A BEGINNER .
ANY WAY , I WANTED TO SAY THIS IS MY FIRST SUBMISSION AND I AM KIND OF A BEGINNER SO PLEASE GO EASY ON ME ! (: :)
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PLEASE WATCH MY SECOND EPISODE AND GIMME IDEAS FOR MY THIRD

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BananaCrateBananaCrate

Rated 3 / 5 stars October 11, 2008

you'll need to know all this stuff to get better

- Its doctor weil, not wily
- the guy u called 'zero' is omega if u didnt knew...
- Harpuia (green one) is a boy
- avoid abreviation such as 'dr'
- dont make text like the geez u put the last time
- u seems limited on the animation... sfx are always nice.
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Anyway, decent flash, u have a good base. try not starting immediatly in action ( why the hell did harpuia and fefnir would kill weil? ) Develop the story :). the sound was decent... it need music and maybe better sounds effect.
This deserve the average grade: a 6 on the review and a 3.


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globep responds:

You don't understand , the girl im talkin about is the blue girl and i weren't talkin about harpuia . And in the storyline zero got transformed into omega.
Anyway , thanks for complimenting my flash.


vamprikovampriko

Rated 5 / 5 stars October 11, 2008

hey

its need backround music and a story or plot line


globep responds:

The story was supposed to be about zero and ..... um ....... that girl get's lost . but I know , it weren't very good


WilliamSideWilliamSide

Rated 3.5 / 5 stars October 11, 2008

Points too improve

Ok, first, I think it was pretty good. Quite simple but good. However, I think that you can do a lot better for your other movies. I don't know a thing in how to make flash, but here is a couple of suggetions I made for you.

1) Music : You movie is some kind of "empty" I think because there is no music for it. I think that ading some could help you a lot. one for the ordynary battles, one for the boss battles, one when the base will self destruc and other. Just search for midi in google or yahoo and you should find some.

2) Sounds: You used a couple of sounds for explosions, slashes and other. I think that you could put some more for other actions(ex: your caracter are robotic. Add some metallic sounds when they move, junp, ...) and/or just add a few more because you're always using the same (ex: You could have three sounds for the slashes, two for the guns, two for explosions and others). And you could add sounds for other actions like a charging sound when Fefnir is chargind is gun.

3) Minsc: Some little details could make your movies better without too much work I guess. First, add a "play" button before the video start and a "replay?" button at the end. A quality button could be a good idea if you improve your graphics(or put more action at the same time) and a scene selection if you make a longer one(witch I hope you will do).

4) Screan : Ok, I think this one could be more complexe but, if you want a challenge, you can try and I would be pleased to give you my opinion. I think that playing with the screan could really improve your video. You could shake it when they break the door/wall or when one of them would put a powerfull attack. You could add flashing effects in the same situations. I think that if your movie was in a bigger screan it woul be better. More space for fight so you could move more your caracters (I actually think that they are too static so making them move more could be a good idea.) and you could make some "zoom in" and "zoom out" effect wich are really nice I think.

5) Good points: Ok, I said a lot of things I think you could do to improve your videos. It doesn't mean I fund it bad or anything, I just want you to get better. There is some goods point in your submission. I really liked the way you made your caracters speak. I think that, for a first movie, you have a good sens of the action and more. Keep up the good work!^^

I think that's all. If you're lost i my suggestions and you don't know what to do I really suggest you to add music fisrt. I think it is the main point. If you liked this review and fund it helpfull (wich I really wishe) and you would like to have more hints for your next submissions, don't hesitate to contact me with my Newgrounds account. I have a few good links that I could send you for more sprite, music and sound if you're interested but I think that I can't put them here so you will have to contact mee if you want them. I wish that I helped you and if you make an other submission(wich I really hope for) contact me so I could give you more hint.

keep up the good work.
William Side


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globep responds:

Thanks . I dont know how but I'll try


NeisanNeisan

Rated 5 / 5 stars October 11, 2008

OMG o.O

That was awesome! XD Make more! please?!?! T^T Such a cliff hanger!


globep responds:

Thanks I Know Im not that good


PianogodPianogod

Rated 3 / 5 stars October 11, 2008

It was pretty good

for like a middle of a series. I think you need to work on the beginning a little bit more. It seems you just started the series at the middle of it, and no beginning. I didn't know what was going on and basically all I saw was fighting. Also I think it would be better if you had some background music between fights. So work on the beginning part first, have a plot, and add music to it, and you got yourself a great series. Oh and also make the text of each character be more slower, and clearer, I had a little trouble trying to read the text, and I know that it's hard for you to make characters talking at the speed of your reading but other people aren't good at that like me. And one more thing, you need to add a preloader in these flashes. So in summary, once again, make a beginning first (show what is going on), have a plot (story), add background music, make the captions of the characters slowy, and clearly, and add a preloader, and you got yourself, a nice series.


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globep responds:

I SHOULD Try and get better , but I got so used to stickman animations that i LOST my sprite skills.O
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