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This is my VERY FIRST FLASH!!! I'm excited to see what you guys think of it... Please give me constructive criticism! You can figure out the story by yourself, I think it's kinda easy to.
Sorry about the 2 mb size, I know it's a bit big for a movie this short, but it's because of the music file.
dude, srsly, wtf... like i told u in class, emo. i will admit that can use flash better than me, but u shouldnt use those skill to make Crap! this next one that ur talking about had better be good! srsly... but other than that its good.
GAAAAH IT'S NOT EMOOOOOOOOO
But yeah, my next one will be better.
very very good start
keep on practicing and you'll get very far!
10/10 for your first try
sad story although a little hard to follow. i would make things more solid instead of waving so much and then clean up some of the action and shrink the music file a bit
Not too awful!
Basically, the music melody is superb!!
Secondly, the story is short and sweet, yet to the point...!!
But one thing for sure, improve the drawings and it will be more then 3/5 and 7/10 from me!!!
But you need a preloader really. There wasn't too much animation of the actual characters involved. I'd reccomend learning walking cycles so that you can actually animate some of them,. Same goes for vehicles, at least give the tyres the look of moving. Also, the drawings were a little primitive. About the music: Take a look on NG for audio compression tutorials (In fact, i think there is a link to one just before you submit).
Thanks for the review and the great advice!
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