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This is my very first attempt at a flash movie. I would appreciate any tips or constructive criticism so that I can improve on my second project. Please don't be too harsh.
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You could probably make the jumping and the moving of the face a little more smooth, good job btw.
Thanks i'll do that with number 2
hmmm cute i thought the bloc was cute but still improvements could be made lyk addin musics or sumthin ncie try though xDDDD
Not a bad first attempt. You used sound which it seems a lot of people don't on their first video. Having worked with flash a little myself, I recognise that you did some things that can be a little difficult. Can't wait to see what you come up with next. But don't neglect the rest of the colors so much next time. It's okay to spend a little more time on some realizm.
Good simple concept, a character that can easily be made in to a series/collection.
Spend more time on stories, the story should be the driving force of the animation and the tool you use to animate and your inherent skill in making pixels move are the medium in which you tell this story.
Look forward to see what you do in the future
Okay thanks, i'll remember that in future.
Nothing special of course but the aesthetic is okay. I wouldn't have much to suggest other then work on more and make it bigger and better.
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