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um... this isnt anything amazing, just an attempt at a semi decent flash by a noob flash artist, I would enjoy criticism... and uh... I suck at drawing explosions :)
To my surprise this is atually quite kool!
I like this. Good effort was spent doing it, and its funny.
the animation is short & without clear plot
tips - grenades usually need to have the pin removed to explode. Doing the motion of taking off the pin without actually showing the pin being removed and tossed isn't sufficient. Your explosion did indeed suck, and the only thing I can offer for advice towards improving is you should remember explosions tend to cause a quick burst of light (quickly fade to white screen and back is an option) then followed by the already going flames and smoke. Drawing squiggly red and yellow lines is also insufficient. Good luck with further animations. Compared to other "noob"s, you actually have potential.
Thanx for some of the help, and about the flash being short without a clear plot. It was just supposed to be a short. But thanx for the compliments and help :)!
ill work on the explosion and the grenade pen flying.
shouldn't make it
if you are going to make a movie entirely about explosions then it would be good if you could draw explosions!! also some music would be good.
I liked how you used a real vid and threw in some flash animation in there
couple of suggestions
When the stick figure, threw the grenade, he didn't pull off the ring (whatever its called). Even a small detail helps.
Also, when he breaks the roof of the car, there's no sound. Add some kind of sound, like glass breaking.
Create a background for you video, don't use what's off your camera.
Explosions? Try finding some kind of image, and do the same for the grenade.
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