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It's finally done, my first real short!
Took me about 4 months from drafting to finishing.
I really hope you enjoy it, and please don't forget to rate and comment ;)
Great job on the animating! It's obvious a lot of work went into this, and it's really cool to see the complete work. It was pretty entertaining, and had a good selection of music. I think some more sound effects would have been nice, though, like, the click, squeak, click squeak of the old lady would have been funny. Anyway, awesome stuff, and thanks for submitting it!
3 Audio guys and 1 Animator... and what lacks the most? The sounds!
I understand that the credited audio folk only made music tracks, but still, at first glance you'd of expected the audio in this to be exceptional. I didn't think you really needed 3 tracks, they just seemed to be filler due to the fact that no other sounds were playing. It also doesn't appear to be timed very well with the content, when the old lady is stopping the guy from moving the second time round and the music just stops, I thought that was a genuine piece of comedy... but then the pause lasted too long, and the music didn't actually come back at all, instead it changed track!
All in all i'm quite impressed with the visual side of things, story seems okay too. But you NEED to work on sounds, the miss-match and silences are really killing this piece. Forget about actual music tracks to play in the background, you can sort those out last... they are the LEAST important factor for an animation like this.
Keep it up, I hope for progress.
I really appreciate your review. Good to know what I should work on. Somehow I always suck in adding audio to flash, definitely something that I should work on. so thanks for your suggestions.
I like the animation style, it's rather basic and kind of silly, but it adds some humor to the movie.
Wow.. you have talent.
Ok..i really enjoyed your movie, the story was long and interesting. The style was nice... however i think you should have put inside some voices.
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