Score: 9
"My my, a NG appearance?"
date: August 17, 2008
You should really submit mawr. :3
Anyway, I said I'd tell you all the things I loved about this animation and I certainly will do that.
+ I like the ambient nature the flash. There isn't anything I have to actually pay attention to, it all just kind of washes over me in a mellow way. I'm not really enjoying the ride as I am finding delight in the aimless direction it's taking me.
+ The frequent change of animation styles is mind-boggling and a great showcase for your capabilities. My favorites include the dancing scene with Hal and the cut outs of her running down the stairs.
I can go on an on, but I wouldn't be a good friend if I didn't offer some advice--even knowing that this was a casual project.
-The first scene lasted too long--you probably weren't even planning on animating the rest of the animation how you had while you were working on the first scene--and whether or not that's the case, that's what comes off as I watch it. Most modern attention spans probably wouldn't sit through what looks like a small set of animation loops set to music for what feels like a solid 30 seconds. My suggestions are to work on timing for your future casual productions.
- There's this overlaying creepy-ness factor about this animation that I can't deny, especially if some dude I knew personally came out with this on one day. Heh, that's just more of a personally emotional line that I lay with my platonic buds more than anything else, so pay me no mind. >:3
Good stuff all over, great showcase of what you do best. All you need is polish and timing, your art speaks for itself.
August 17, 2008
Author's Response:
oo fair enough but yeah i had no idea what i was doing lol as i keep saying it was a practice that got out of hand whichi actually liked in the end lol originaly i was just going to do a 30 second test with a recording i had but it ended up working out differently lol
an overlaying creepyness factor hmmm lol well i can see that from an outside point of view since is basicly just one huge overblown montage of injokes typa thing just meant for me an Hayley( an she already knew before hand what she means to me lol) which i was quite proud of since i haven't done much animating lately and nothing i liked as much so i thought id up loaded it and see what happens
anyway thanks for your razor sharp whit and critiqueing : D
