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Sorry people for putting this up twice! but i've fixed sound a lill-bitt!
and this flash isn't as serious as it seems, you are free to think whatever you like :)
don't over analyze this flash since i didn't !
thanks for all good comments last time! those who got touched by this flash made it all worth-while!
I originaly made this flash after i've had a discussion with my grandfather about freedom ( kinda boring, I know ) and then I decided to make a flash of what we spoke of.
So the bird represents freedom etc.
frames around - 700
fps - 18
support - My dog named "torsten"
thanks for watching <3
Extra credit to gary jules! he is the singer of the song "mad world"
There needs to be more here to really warrent a high score. It was short, and thats ok, however it was also sudden. You have agood point here but you need to make it more clear. Far to many people will miss your point and think that the dirds shooting at the dove should be hurt and thats not what your point is. I would hate to see your message get constued just because it isn't accurate enough. Good work, I would just like to see more done with your idea.
make believe, not war
nice graphics, good message, nice and short
poor bird.. heh
Short but really good
Short but gets to the point. Was kinda weird to see a Nazi bird next to a flak cannon with exceptionally good aim for a target so low to the ground.
jk jk good stuff man!
As many others have stated, it was short, but still very good. Music set a good mood.
Another Review =P
Last time you submitted this, I gave a review, and you wanted to know what you were doing wrong with the Flash even though so many people thought the art was good. Maybe this time I'll be a little more helpful in the 'advice' department. =P
Okay, firstly, your art and the story is what ought to get your point across. Use symbolism (perhaps the bird was caged at some point, and now values his freedom, for example), sound (music that fits the mood you're trying to convey ALWAYS makes a mediocre movie a better one) and storyline (tell a story of freedom, explain to the audience WHY it is fragile using images and sounds with your awesome art skills).
Using text to convey your ideas often times makes the video seem rushed or as though you didn't feel up to putting in the effort. Now, this isn't to say that text shouldn't be in the movie at all -- rather that it ought to be used sparingly.
You could draw out the words yourself, keeping to your own style, and add that much more quality to the 'toon than there was before. When I said that you had lots of potential, I meant that your idea is a good one (if it isn't an original, you're at least trying to tell it in an original fashion) and your art skills are good. Now all you need is to figure out how to combine all of the appropriate elements to take a 'toon from "good" to "great!" =)
And before anyone else here tries to give me that, "And what have YOU submitted!?" line, just know that as a Graphic Designer I do have some know-how when it comes to approaching target audiences and making a piece of art say what you want it to without the use of text. So there. Haha
I hope that was a little more clear than last time, and if you have any questions about what I've suggested or would like a little more detail, go right ahead and send me a PM. =)
thank you very very much!
BUT WHAT HAVE YOOOOUU SUBMITTED? no just kidding
very helpful advice.. I can't even remember everything at the same time
hehe once again thanks :)
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