Score: 6
"Good concept, good joke, way flimsy followthrough"
date: July 8, 2008
good! even as a short, though, it lacked some easy tricks to make it better: maybe have a panting running sound and show the dude jumping under the frisbee. not entirely, at first, give the viewer something to be surprised at, like make them think it's a dog by just showing hair, and then some forehead, then the sound becomes recognizable, then -bam- he tackles it. And then some further quick animation showing him get sick or "this tastes gross" to segue Dettol in. And, seeing him act funny in the background would get kicks. I'd watch it!
July 9, 2008
Author's Response:
thanks for the tips and the fair vote :D Thanks !