good
sorry i was on vacation but your flash is great for a starter. Dont give up its going to get better
Author Comments
LOOK this is my first flash ever i have no idea at all what i'm doing, there is supposed to be music in it but i may have done something to change it, i'm not sure.
this flash follows a character named Nick who is based on me, having a bad 4th of july, he then tells his good friend melissa about it.
just so you're not confused, when Nick and Melissa are texting to eachother, the blue background shows Nick's phone, but Melissa's text. when the background is a pinkish color, it's Melissa's phone with Nick's text on it. yes that would mean that Nick should be in his house, he's actually hiding in his back yard. ( I really do have a bench in my back yard.) i may have messed the sound up, and got a little lazy with the drawings, but hey, it's my first flash, go easy on me.
darkblue6676 responds:
thanks, glad you liked it.
good
Certainly good for a first time. The sounds not working on my computer, so I can't criteque on the sounds if there are any. It was pretty funny, but can you have less use of the word like? It gets annoying, and I don't think they even say that in texts.
But this was still a good effort.
darkblue6676 responds:
sorry, there is a problem with the sound,do you know wht it could be?
and i didn't relise i used like so much, so i'll try to be aware of that kind of stuff next time.
pretty good
it was funny and had some good animation bits in it but yeah some of it was choppy liked it thought with some work you could become really good at this 8*
darkblue6676 responds:
it wasn't supposed to look all that great. but thank you
hiya
hiya nice work on this the animation was fine but there was little of it and also the drawings that you did were a bit choppy i likedit because it was funny . il think you could become a really good animator. (9/10) (5/5)
darkblue6676 responds:
thank you, it was supposed to be choppy.
It's okay
It's alright for your first flash. The animation was good for the most part and the story wasn't bad. Next time you should use some voice acting though and look the animation over before you submit to make sure you didn't mess anything up.
darkblue6676 responds:
yea, my microphone SUCKS! otherwise, i would have.
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